The will of the people cannot make just that which is unjust
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The will of the people cannot make just that which is unjust
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Introduction
The will of the people cannot make just that which is unjust. Anjali Sondhiya, 15 year old girl, lost her father and she has not even recovered from this shock, another tragic event happened in her life. Her relatives has fixed her engagement, she was not ready for it, she wanted to study and fulfill the dream of her demised father. But it was opinion of large section that she should get settled by marrying a successful boy. This is the story of almost every 2nd girl even in 21st century.
The will of the people cannot make just that which is unjust. Anjali Sondhiya, 15 year old girl, lost her father and she has not even recovered from this shock, another tragic event happened in her life. Her relatives has fixed her engagement, she was not ready for it, she wanted to study and fulfill the dream of her demised father. But it was opinion of large section that she should get settled by marrying a successful boy. This is the story of almost every 2nd girl even in 21st century.
Understanding Just and Unjust
Role of female is considered to cook, clean, obey the order of male counterparts. The question arises who has decided their role? It is the society or better to say it is 'will of the people' that women should do this? Is this just with them to impose societal will ignoring their own desires? Then, Article 21 and 19 of the constitution will require amendment to clear that Right to Life and Freedom of Expression is restricted for half of population of the country. It means that, presently no such bar has been imposed on women by our constitution or any other law. Then it will not be wrong to mention that women are deprived of justice and it is unjust to impose 'will of people' on them. It can be said that, "THE WILL OF THE PEOPLE CAN'T MAKE JUST THAT WHICH IS UNJUST". BOUNDARY OF JUST & UNJUST A clear understanding of what is just and unjust will help in better analysis of the topic. One aspect we have seen in previous part, just & unjust can be differentiated using constitutional values and rules & regulations. If something / someone is compliance of laws & such values, his/her action / speech can be considered as just. The second worth noting factor is the impact of decision or action and its long term influence can assist in classification of justful & unjust. The example of present climate change can be considered here. The large strata of society wishes to develop & have economic growth at the cost of environment. The ignorance of long term impact of present actions like emissions of fuels / GHGs, deforestation, indiscriminate consumption of natural resource can make them appear just. But in actuality, disasters which world has to face in coming years need emphasis and make such actions unjust. Further, to distinguish between just & unjust, the major consideration should be precedent it is likely to set. We have seen the imposed role on women by society where they are deprived of having their own recognition. It will make them dependent, deprive our countries from benefit of demographic dividend, reduces our international competitiveness and provide stereo to coming generation to follow. Apart from all above factors, it is not deniable that people's will should be considered and valued but it should not be sole decisive factor to act/govern/behave. Such single oriented focus can have disastrous consequences for future. We have seen how blindly following 'will of people' can make the go ahead with unjust activities and have just and unjust needs to be demarcated to avoid vagueness.
Role of female is considered to cook, clean, obey the order of male counterparts. The question arises who has decided their role? It is the society or better to say it is 'will of the people' that women should do this? Is this just with them to impose societal will ignoring their own desires? Then, Article 21 and 19 of the constitution will require amendment to clear that Right to Life and Freedom of Expression is restricted for half of population of the country. It means that, presently no such bar has been imposed on women by our constitution or any other law. Then it will not be wrong to mention that women are deprived of justice and it is unjust to impose 'will of people' on them. It can be said that, "THE WILL OF THE PEOPLE CAN'T MAKE JUST THAT WHICH IS UNJUST". BOUNDARY OF JUST & UNJUST A clear understanding of what is just and unjust will help in better analysis of the topic. One aspect we have seen in previous part, just & unjust can be differentiated using constitutional values and rules & regulations. If something / someone is compliance of laws & such values, his/her action / speech can be considered as just. The second worth noting factor is the impact of decision or action and its long term influence can assist in classification of justful & unjust. The example of present climate change can be considered here. The large strata of society wishes to develop & have economic growth at the cost of environment. The ignorance of long term impact of present actions like emissions of fuels / GHGs, deforestation, indiscriminate consumption of natural resource can make them appear just. But in actuality, disasters which world has to face in coming years need emphasis and make such actions unjust. Further, to distinguish between just & unjust, the major consideration should be precedent it is likely to set. We have seen the imposed role on women by society where they are deprived of having their own recognition. It will make them dependent, deprive our countries from benefit of demographic dividend, reduces our international competitiveness and provide stereo to coming generation to follow. Apart from all above factors, it is not deniable that people's will should be considered and valued but it should not be sole decisive factor to act/govern/behave. Such single oriented focus can have disastrous consequences for future. We have seen how blindly following 'will of people' can make the go ahead with unjust activities and have just and unjust needs to be demarcated to avoid vagueness.
The Trap of Justice
We will further see why there is trap of appearance of just due to large will of people. Moving ahead, we will analyse the cause of being unjust despite of having wider acceptance and how these causes should be mitigated to promote justice. WILL OF THE PEOPLE : TRAP OF JUSTICE We don't operate in vacuum, this realisation move with everyone at every stage of life. It inculcated/developed a mindset that 'will of people' is only 'what will be done'. In that rigid mindset, we fails to distinguish between 'what will be done' and 'what should be done'. Before independence, widow's head used to shaved and she was made to burn with dead body of her late husband. Why so? Because, it was what everyone knows about she became widow that 'what will be done next with her. No one used to think 'what should be done' like made her to study or remarriage or even she can leave alone respectfully. Latter could have been considered as injustice while former seems right to society because of our mindset of being surviving in society. 'Unity is strength', this is what we have been taught since childhood. Here unity can be equated with 'will' of the people. This unity can have strength but it cannot make what is wrong as right. As we know, concept of trade union is prevalent in industries. Many times, these union resort to strike to get their demand fulfilled. Whether all their demands are correct just because it is represented by all employees of organisation - No, that's not true, these union can have strength but not justice on their side. Similarly, re-emphasis of one point have vast psychological impact on others that what all are saying is correct morally and procedurally. The same phenomenon our country follows in choosing its ruler also i.e. government. In democratic system, govt. is choose by will of the people. There is no second opinion on view that govt. always doesn't take justful actions. Even govt itself are alleged of corruption, promoting their own interest ignoring societal goals, prioritizing the necessities as per their own will. These are the reasons which led to change in govt and rise in coalition political parties. We have analysed here will of the people compels us to believe in its just-fulness. Let's see why such larger will fails to promote justice. REASONS OF UNJUST WILL OF PEOPLE People are self-centred where they don't mind ignoring values and morals for their personal gains. These individual centricity compels one to ignore larger interest and adopts biased approach. This is one of major cause where will of people fails to deliver justice. The another foremost cause is lack of one's knowledge on all aspects before generation and development of will. This promotes focus on 'what one knows' rather that 'what actually is'. As we have previously seen example of trade union, employees are not told about perspective of management which culminated in opting even for unjust demands too. The third worth noting reason is prioritization of short term gains over long term impact. During elections, cash benefits, free alcohol, exaggerated manifestos are used to influence will of people. Then, people fail to analyse larger impact of policies and manifestos and keep dreaming of cash benefits & alcohol they are receiving at the moment. In other words, use of money & muscle power can also be said to have influenced the will of people. The last cause could be adoption of rigid attitude by people and closing their mindset to alternate perspectives. This cause seems hard to believe in this present age of social media where echo chambers can easily be broken. But, our older generation which still comprises of large population along with section not open to social media can be grouped in this category. These are one of major cause behind continuation of social evil practices even in this modernized century. The most important question arises here is how to resolve this problem and ensure decision is just either by will of people or without their will.
We will further see why there is trap of appearance of just due to large will of people. Moving ahead, we will analyse the cause of being unjust despite of having wider acceptance and how these causes should be mitigated to promote justice. WILL OF THE PEOPLE : TRAP OF JUSTICE We don't operate in vacuum, this realisation move with everyone at every stage of life. It inculcated/developed a mindset that 'will of people' is only 'what will be done'. In that rigid mindset, we fails to distinguish between 'what will be done' and 'what should be done'. Before independence, widow's head used to shaved and she was made to burn with dead body of her late husband. Why so? Because, it was what everyone knows about she became widow that 'what will be done next with her. No one used to think 'what should be done' like made her to study or remarriage or even she can leave alone respectfully. Latter could have been considered as injustice while former seems right to society because of our mindset of being surviving in society. 'Unity is strength', this is what we have been taught since childhood. Here unity can be equated with 'will' of the people. This unity can have strength but it cannot make what is wrong as right. As we know, concept of trade union is prevalent in industries. Many times, these union resort to strike to get their demand fulfilled. Whether all their demands are correct just because it is represented by all employees of organisation - No, that's not true, these union can have strength but not justice on their side. Similarly, re-emphasis of one point have vast psychological impact on others that what all are saying is correct morally and procedurally. The same phenomenon our country follows in choosing its ruler also i.e. government. In democratic system, govt. is choose by will of the people. There is no second opinion on view that govt. always doesn't take justful actions. Even govt itself are alleged of corruption, promoting their own interest ignoring societal goals, prioritizing the necessities as per their own will. These are the reasons which led to change in govt and rise in coalition political parties. We have analysed here will of the people compels us to believe in its just-fulness. Let's see why such larger will fails to promote justice. REASONS OF UNJUST WILL OF PEOPLE People are self-centred where they don't mind ignoring values and morals for their personal gains. These individual centricity compels one to ignore larger interest and adopts biased approach. This is one of major cause where will of people fails to deliver justice. The another foremost cause is lack of one's knowledge on all aspects before generation and development of will. This promotes focus on 'what one knows' rather that 'what actually is'. As we have previously seen example of trade union, employees are not told about perspective of management which culminated in opting even for unjust demands too. The third worth noting reason is prioritization of short term gains over long term impact. During elections, cash benefits, free alcohol, exaggerated manifestos are used to influence will of people. Then, people fail to analyse larger impact of policies and manifestos and keep dreaming of cash benefits & alcohol they are receiving at the moment. In other words, use of money & muscle power can also be said to have influenced the will of people. The last cause could be adoption of rigid attitude by people and closing their mindset to alternate perspectives. This cause seems hard to believe in this present age of social media where echo chambers can easily be broken. But, our older generation which still comprises of large population along with section not open to social media can be grouped in this category. These are one of major cause behind continuation of social evil practices even in this modernized century. The most important question arises here is how to resolve this problem and ensure decision is just either by will of people or without their will.
Conclusion
The same phenomenon our country follows in choosing its ruler also i.e. government. In democratic system, govt. is choose by will of the people. There is no second opinion on view that govt. always doesn't take justful actions. Even govt itself are alleged of corruption, promoting their own interest ignoring societal goals, prioritizing the necessities as per their own will.
The same phenomenon our country follows in choosing its ruler also i.e. government. In democratic system, govt. is choose by will of the people. There is no second opinion on view that govt. always doesn't take justful actions. Even govt itself are alleged of corruption, promoting their own interest ignoring societal goals, prioritizing the necessities as per their own will.
The Art of First Impressions
Your introduction is your one chance to make the examiner want to read more. Think of it as a movie trailer: grab attention, make a promise, and create anticipation. Most students start with definitions - the essay equivalent of 'once upon a time.' Distinguished essays start with intrigue.
"The introduction presents a serious subject matter but lacks a strong engagement hook and clear roadmap for the reader."
"The emotional element in the mention of Anjali Sondhiya connects the reader to the personal impact of societal issues."
"The introduction needs a more compelling hook and a clearer thesis statement that outlines your argument."
"Focusing on refining the hook and providing a concise roadmap will significantly enhance the introduction."
You Have:
- Narrative about Anjali Sondhiya
- Philosophical statement about people's will
You Need:
- A provocative hook Hook
- A clear and debatable thesis Thesis
- A coherent roadmap for the essay Roadmap
The Hook: Your First 10 Words
The hook is your opening punch. It should make the examiner's eyebrows rise, create a question in their mind, or present a tension that demands resolution. Definitions don't do this. Questions, paradoxes, and vivid scenarios do.
Most students start with 'X has been important since ancient times.' This is true but boring. Your hook should be surprising, not safe.
"The will of the people cannot make just that which is unjust."
1 Provocative Question
"Is the will of the people, when rooted in societal norms, always just?"
Why it works: This question draws the reader's interest by questioning a widely held belief, prompting them to think about justice.
2 Paradox Hook
"In a society that values freedom, why are countless young girls still forced into marriages against their will?"
Why it works: This paradox highlights the contrast between societal values and individual realities, making the reader reconsider their assumptions.
3 Scenario Hook
"Imagine Anjali Sondhiya, just 15, caught between her dreams of education and the harsh reality of an arranged marriage."
Why it works: Setting a scene invites the reader to empathize with the character's predicament and connects them emotionally to a broader societal issue.
Ask a question that challenges assumptions or creates intellectual tension
In an age of [modern reality], why do [surprising behavior/belief] persist?
Present a contradiction that creates cognitive dissonance
[Concept] promises [X], yet delivers [opposite/unexpected].
Paint a vivid picture with unexpected actors or situations
A [unexpected person 1] does [X]. A [unexpected person 2] does [Y]. [Pattern/Insight].
Lead with a surprising number that demands explanation
[Surprising statistic]. Behind this number lies [deeper truth].
X has been important since ancient times.In today's world, X is very relevant.X is a topic of great significance.Since time immemorial, X has...X can be defined as...
"The first sentence tells the examiner who they're dealing with. A definition says 'average student.' A paradox says 'someone who thinks differently.' First impressions stick."
Foundation: Thesis + Roadmap
Your thesis is your promise to the reader - what you're going to prove. Your roadmap is the journey you'll take them on. Together, they set up your entire essay. A weak foundation means the examiner isn't sure where you're going.
Thesis without a position is just a topic sentence. Roadmap without anticipation is just a table of contents.
"The will of the people cannot make just that which is unjust."
1 Crisp Stand
"The interests of society can lead to injustices that silence women's aspirations."
Why it works: This thesis presents a clear argument that can be debated, setting up the discussion effectively.
2 Debatable Angle
"While the will of the people appears just, it often perpetuates inequality instead of addressing it."
Why it works: This offers an angle that others may argue against, creating room for discussion in the essay.
3 Sophisticated Balance
"The popular decision-making process can sometimes mask profound injustices faced by marginalized individuals, illustrating a critical flaw in democratic ideals."
Why it works: This approach acknowledges complexity while framing a position of critique that invites discussion.
Crisp Stand
Clear, direct position with analytical edge
Debatable Angle
Acknowledge counter-view, then take position
Sophisticated Balance
Embrace complexity with a nuanced position
"Not present"
1 Natural Flow
"This essay will explore the contrast between societal norms and individual rights, investigating how popular sentiment often leads to unjust outcomes."
Why it works: This approach ties the roadmap to the core argument, creating logical anticipation for the reader.
2 Question-Based
"How do societal expectations impact individual rights? This essay delves into this critical question by examining the implications of communal expectations on girls' futures."
Why it works: This format raises curiosity about the answers, making the reader eager to continue.
3 Thematic Preview
"By dissecting the nature of justice from both individual and societal angles, this essay will reveal the discrepancies that often go unnoticed in the quest for consensus."
Why it works: It intrigues the reader without detailing too much, setting the stage for nuanced arguments ahead.
Natural Flow
Weave structure into narrative without listing
Question-Based
Frame structure as questions to be answered
Thematic Preview
Drop intriguing references without explaining
Thesis: "A clear thesis tells the examiner 'I'm going to argue something.' This creates anticipation and gives them a lens to evaluate your essay. No thesis = no argument = lower marks."
Roadmap: "A good roadmap tells the examiner 'this essay is organized and going somewhere interesting.' A list tells them 'this student is mechanical.' Anticipation beats information."
The Opening Polish
Your introduction is the most scrutinized part of your essay. Every word matters. We'll teach you three style techniques that instantly elevate your opening: Parallelism, Antithesis, and Crescendo.
Introductions often suffer from 'playing it safe.' This is exactly when you need to take stylistic risks.
"The language is straightforward but could be enriched with more impactful vocabulary."
Parallelism
MissingAntithesis
MissingCrescendo
Missing"Anjali Sondhiya, 15 year old girl, lost her father and she has not even recovered from this shock, another tragic event happened in her life."
"The will of the people cannot make just that which is unjust."
"Can the collective will of society truly justify the injustice faced by the vulnerable?"
Parallelism
Repeating grammatical structure for rhythm and emphasis
Antithesis
Placing contrasting ideas in parallel structure to highlight tension
Crescendo
Building from small to large, quiet to loud, personal to universal
The Complete Transformation
See how all the elements come together. This is what a distinguished introduction looks like.
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Words AfterThe will of the people cannot make just that which is unjust. Anjali Sondhiya, 15 year old girl, lost her father and she has not even recovered from this shock, another tragic event happened in her life. Her relatives has fixed her engagement, she was not ready for it, she wanted to study and fulfill the dream of her demised father. But it was opinion of large section that she should get settled by marrying a successful boy. This is the story of almost every 2nd girl even in 21st century.
Can the collective will of society truly justify the injustice faced by the vulnerable? At just 15, Anjali Sondhiya finds herself navigating the harrowing loss of her father while being thrust into the pressures of an arranged engagement against her dreams of pursuing education—the very aspiration her father cherished. Unfortunately, many in society believe a successful marriage is her only path forward. Anjali's story is not unique; it mirrors the experiences of countless girls in the 21st century.
hook
Transformed into a provocative question.
thesis
Clarified and made debatable.
roadmap
Incorporated a preview of key themes.
language
Enhanced vocabulary and emotional depth.
Ideal Structure
- Hook (attention)
- Thesis (promise)
- Roadmap (anticipation)
Common Mistake
DefinitionVague statementList of sections
Most introductions are forgettable because they play it safe. Distinguished introductions take risks: provocative hooks, debatable theses, and roadmaps that tease.
First Impression Effect
The first paragraph colors the entire reading experience. Start strong and you're read generously.
Differentiation Signal
A unique opening signals 'this student is different.' The examiner pays more attention.
Thesis as Lens
A clear thesis gives the examiner a framework. Without it, they're lost and frustrated.
Anticipation Value
A good roadmap creates eagerness. The examiner looks forward to each section instead of dreading it.
Stage 1 Definition Writer
Focus: Stop opening with definitions
Goal: Recognize boring openings
Stage 2 Hook Crafter
Focus: Master 3 hook types
Goal: Grab attention consistently
Stage 3 Thesis Builder
Focus: State debatable positions
Goal: Make clear arguments
Stage 4 Master Opener
Focus: Integrate all elements with style
Goal: Unforgettable introductions