the future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of the dreams
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the future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of the dreams
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Introduction
the future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams "Rome wasnt built in a day, but they were laying bricks every day". John Holmwood sayings shows how Rome which began as Coglomeration, later turned into state, eventually into Empire. this was result of people's dreams and their belief in it which led them to keep working towards this beautiful goal. we often inorder to fulfill a goal, look at the end result but missout on the most essential aspect of it i.e. believing in yourself and keep working for it. One who believes in his dream has a sense of motivation which leads his way towards future.
the future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams "Rome wasnt built in a day, but they were laying bricks every day". John Holmwood sayings shows how Rome which began as Coglomeration, later turned into state, eventually into Empire. this was result of people's dreams and their belief in it which led them to keep working towards this beautiful goal. we often inorder to fulfill a goal, look at the end result but missout on the most essential aspect of it i.e. believing in yourself and keep working for it. One who believes in his dream has a sense of motivation which leads his way towards future.
Historical Examples of Belief in Dreams
Mahatma Gandhi belief in "Swaraj" pushed him against the boundaries - facing brutalities, being jailed intern coming out to be "Father of Nation". Boundaries that we create around us, try to push us inward, but Dreams which give sleepless nights make us break it. It requires persistence which calls for recurrent efforts towards our goal. Chatrapati Shivaji Maharaj who emerged victorious despite threats from Bahmani, Mughals is a case in point. Dreams help us to set up goals, target which one desires to achieve. It acts as a manifesto towards bright future. Nelson Mandela in his first presidentship press, on being asked what (8) kept him going, even after two dozens of Jail term? His answer was simple, he quoted his favourite line from "Invictus" - "I am master of my fate, I am captain of my soul. Mastery over fate is an act of Brave, who in order to reach destination, carves his own way - way to success. Dashrath Manjhi after loss of his wife, did not keep cribbing about the circumstances, but made a way out of it by making a tunnel all alone with chisel and hammer. The biggest tool he had was belief. It is this belief which makes us overcome adversities. As AP.J.
Mahatma Gandhi belief in "Swaraj" pushed him against the boundaries - facing brutalities, being jailed intern coming out to be "Father of Nation". Boundaries that we create around us, try to push us inward, but Dreams which give sleepless nights make us break it. It requires persistence which calls for recurrent efforts towards our goal. Chatrapati Shivaji Maharaj who emerged victorious despite threats from Bahmani, Mughals is a case in point. Dreams help us to set up goals, target which one desires to achieve. It acts as a manifesto towards bright future. Nelson Mandela in his first presidentship press, on being asked what (8) kept him going, even after two dozens of Jail term? His answer was simple, he quoted his favourite line from "Invictus" - "I am master of my fate, I am captain of my soul. Mastery over fate is an act of Brave, who in order to reach destination, carves his own way - way to success. Dashrath Manjhi after loss of his wife, did not keep cribbing about the circumstances, but made a way out of it by making a tunnel all alone with chisel and hammer. The biggest tool he had was belief. It is this belief which makes us overcome adversities. As AP.J.
The Role of Persistence and Action
Abdul Kalam rightly said, man needs adversities to enjoy success. Arunima Sinha despite loosing her legs after being thrown out of legs, went on to climb Mount Everest with Amputed Legs. Accidents or adversities might break you physically, but it is the belief in dreams which is internal which helps you to achieve heights. Adversities might act as an invisible wall, but belief acts as an instrument which drills through the walls. Dreams under certain circumstances do change, but belief is something that keeps us stranded. The movie "Chapak", which depicts real life incident of acid attack victim, shows how one can morph her face but not her inner strength. Miss Agarwal, went on to find a NGO who worked for other Acid attack victims. Now that we have seen future belongs who believe in beauty of their dreams, but who or what qualities make him believe in his dream, Abraham Lincoln speech "I have a dream" showcases how first and foremost steps is to "dare to dream". Had he not dreamt about prosperous America, America might have been still in shackles of civil war. confidence is the booster, that ignites one's flame towards a dream, eventually lighting it up. "Self confidence" thus makes an individual not only dare to dream but also take steps towards it. Sardar Patel's dream of United India has been a result of his confidence in his negotiation skills and also confidence in his people which made them to come together despite differences. As Zigzaglar rightly said, "It is your attitude not your aptitude which make you reach great altitude". this attitude is result of one's beliefs. Belief in the beauty of dreams expresses itself in attitude of an individual. V.D. Savarkar's dreams of Independent India, shaped his attitude in turn leading to creation of "Abhinav Bharat". Future belongs not only those who believe in their dreams but constantly work towards it. As it is rightly said consistency is the key to success.
Abdul Kalam rightly said, man needs adversities to enjoy success. Arunima Sinha despite loosing her legs after being thrown out of legs, went on to climb Mount Everest with Amputed Legs. Accidents or adversities might break you physically, but it is the belief in dreams which is internal which helps you to achieve heights. Adversities might act as an invisible wall, but belief acts as an instrument which drills through the walls. Dreams under certain circumstances do change, but belief is something that keeps us stranded. The movie "Chapak", which depicts real life incident of acid attack victim, shows how one can morph her face but not her inner strength. Miss Agarwal, went on to find a NGO who worked for other Acid attack victims. Now that we have seen future belongs who believe in beauty of their dreams, but who or what qualities make him believe in his dream, Abraham Lincoln speech "I have a dream" showcases how first and foremost steps is to "dare to dream". Had he not dreamt about prosperous America, America might have been still in shackles of civil war. confidence is the booster, that ignites one's flame towards a dream, eventually lighting it up. "Self confidence" thus makes an individual not only dare to dream but also take steps towards it. Sardar Patel's dream of United India has been a result of his confidence in his negotiation skills and also confidence in his people which made them to come together despite differences. As Zigzaglar rightly said, "It is your attitude not your aptitude which make you reach great altitude". this attitude is result of one's beliefs. Belief in the beauty of dreams expresses itself in attitude of an individual. V.D. Savarkar's dreams of Independent India, shaped his attitude in turn leading to creation of "Abhinav Bharat". Future belongs not only those who believe in their dreams but constantly work towards it. As it is rightly said consistency is the key to success.
The Dark Side of Dreams
Thomas Edison failed numerous times, before succeeding. Thus Paul Coelho in his book "The Alchemist" remarked Beauty of life lies not in falling eight times but rising up the ninth time, keep working towards one's dream. As coin has two sides of coin. There is also a flip side to it. A.P.J. Abdul Kalam remarked, dreams is something not seen during sleep but something which does not let one sleep". It shows that just day dreaming and believing in dream without working towards it is an act of futile. As it is rightly said, one who keeps on reading without applying his knowledge gets into lazy habit of thinking. Just thinking about the D-day and not working towards it do not bore the fruit. Had all our freedom fighters kept on believing in their dream of Independent India without working towards it there would not have been the nation which has not only carved its way but also acts as guiding light for other. Dreams need to be rational, goal setting needs to be objective, which is within individuals or nations capabilities. Irrational goals at times takes us along wrong path or does not let even start our journey towards dream Raja Ram Mohan Roy had a clear moral stand against menace of sati, he stood his ground, wrote against it, eventually leading to ban on practice of sati. Believing in dreams is ok, but what if one has ill motives or bad dreams. As Thomas Locke said, humans by nature are selfish, they will work for themselves at the cost of others. Rampant environmental destruction just for dreams of new house (urbanisation) or few resources for people, shatters dreams of other million like tribes and animals - which makes them loose their homes.
Thomas Edison failed numerous times, before succeeding. Thus Paul Coelho in his book "The Alchemist" remarked Beauty of life lies not in falling eight times but rising up the ninth time, keep working towards one's dream. As coin has two sides of coin. There is also a flip side to it. A.P.J. Abdul Kalam remarked, dreams is something not seen during sleep but something which does not let one sleep". It shows that just day dreaming and believing in dream without working towards it is an act of futile. As it is rightly said, one who keeps on reading without applying his knowledge gets into lazy habit of thinking. Just thinking about the D-day and not working towards it do not bore the fruit. Had all our freedom fighters kept on believing in their dream of Independent India without working towards it there would not have been the nation which has not only carved its way but also acts as guiding light for other. Dreams need to be rational, goal setting needs to be objective, which is within individuals or nations capabilities. Irrational goals at times takes us along wrong path or does not let even start our journey towards dream Raja Ram Mohan Roy had a clear moral stand against menace of sati, he stood his ground, wrote against it, eventually leading to ban on practice of sati. Believing in dreams is ok, but what if one has ill motives or bad dreams. As Thomas Locke said, humans by nature are selfish, they will work for themselves at the cost of others. Rampant environmental destruction just for dreams of new house (urbanisation) or few resources for people, shatters dreams of other million like tribes and animals - which makes them loose their homes.
Conclusion
Had all our freedom fighters kept on believing in their dream of Independent India without working towards it there would not have been the nation which has not only carved its way but also acts as guiding light for other. Dreams need to be rational, goal setting needs to be objective, which is within individuals or nations capabilities. Irrational goals at times takes us along wrong path or does not let even start our journey towards dream Raja Ram Mohan Roy had a clear moral stand against menace of sati, he stood his ground, wrote against it, eventually leading to ban on practice of sati. Believing in dreams is ok, but what if one has ill motives or bad dreams. As Thomas Locke said, humans by nature are selfish, they will work for themselves at the cost of others. Rampant environmental destruction just for dreams of new house (urbanisation) or few resources for people, shatters dreams of other million like tribes and animals - which makes them loose their homes. Adolf Hitler manipulated people of Germany to the extent that people adhered to "Banality of Evil" leading to Holocaust and killing of millions of Jews. Similar was the case of Mussolini. Despite believing in dreams, and working towards it, it might still lead to "failure". Failure are part and parcel of life, each failure comes with teaching, a lesson which guides us again on the path of success. In UPSC itself, despite various setback, there have been people who came out with flying colours. As Winston Churchill rightly said, success is not final, failure is not fatal, it is ones own rigour to keep moving forward matters. Keep up the belief, keep working to towards it, one day or the other you will knock on the door of success. In doing so, one needs to keep on introspecting oneself, one's own action to keep him on track. It is also important that even after achieving dreams and claiming a bright future for time being, one has to still keep up the equilibrium. maintain the forces of life. Rome a vast kingdom eventually fall - be it due to people ignorance or some elite people. In keeping up the spirit, Swami Vivekananda's words must echoe - "Arise, Awake and stop not till the goal is reached"
Had all our freedom fighters kept on believing in their dream of Independent India without working towards it there would not have been the nation which has not only carved its way but also acts as guiding light for other. Dreams need to be rational, goal setting needs to be objective, which is within individuals or nations capabilities. Irrational goals at times takes us along wrong path or does not let even start our journey towards dream Raja Ram Mohan Roy had a clear moral stand against menace of sati, he stood his ground, wrote against it, eventually leading to ban on practice of sati. Believing in dreams is ok, but what if one has ill motives or bad dreams. As Thomas Locke said, humans by nature are selfish, they will work for themselves at the cost of others. Rampant environmental destruction just for dreams of new house (urbanisation) or few resources for people, shatters dreams of other million like tribes and animals - which makes them loose their homes. Adolf Hitler manipulated people of Germany to the extent that people adhered to "Banality of Evil" leading to Holocaust and killing of millions of Jews. Similar was the case of Mussolini. Despite believing in dreams, and working towards it, it might still lead to "failure". Failure are part and parcel of life, each failure comes with teaching, a lesson which guides us again on the path of success. In UPSC itself, despite various setback, there have been people who came out with flying colours. As Winston Churchill rightly said, success is not final, failure is not fatal, it is ones own rigour to keep moving forward matters. Keep up the belief, keep working to towards it, one day or the other you will knock on the door of success. In doing so, one needs to keep on introspecting oneself, one's own action to keep him on track. It is also important that even after achieving dreams and claiming a bright future for time being, one has to still keep up the equilibrium. maintain the forces of life. Rome a vast kingdom eventually fall - be it due to people ignorance or some elite people. In keeping up the spirit, Swami Vivekananda's words must echoe - "Arise, Awake and stop not till the goal is reached"
The Art of First Impressions
Your introduction is your one chance to make the examiner want to read more. Think of it as a movie trailer: grab attention, make a promise, and create anticipation. Most students start with definitions - the essay equivalent of 'once upon a time.' Distinguished essays start with intrigue.
"Your introduction contains some insightful thoughts about dreams, but it lacks a strong hook and a clear roadmap."
"The metaphor of Rome is an apt choice, illustrating the journey toward achieving dreams."
"However, the initial hook is weak and does not effectively capture attention."
"Incorporating a compelling hook and a clear roadmap will significantly enhance your introduction."
You Have:
- A metaphor regarding Rome
- An exploration of belief in dreams
You Need:
- A strong opening hook Hook
- A clear thesis statement Thesis
- A guiding roadmap Roadmap
The Hook: Your First 10 Words
The hook is your opening punch. It should make the examiner's eyebrows rise, create a question in their mind, or present a tension that demands resolution. Definitions don't do this. Questions, paradoxes, and vivid scenarios do.
Most students start with 'X has been important since ancient times.' This is true but boring. Your hook should be surprising, not safe.
"the future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams"
1 Provocative Question
"What if our dreams are the key to unlocking our potential?"
Why it works: This question invites the reader to think deeply about the significance of dreams before proceeding with the essay.
2 Paradox Hook
"In a world full of uncertainties, it is our dreams that provide the greatest certainty."
Why it works: This statement presents a contrast that piques curiosity and draws the reader's attention.
3 Scenario Hook
"Imagine a child gazing at the stars, believing that one day they can touch themβthis is the essence of dreaming."
Why it works: This scenario vividly paints a picture and makes the abstract concept of dreams more tangible.
Ask a question that challenges assumptions or creates intellectual tension
In an age of [modern reality], why do [surprising behavior/belief] persist?
Present a contradiction that creates cognitive dissonance
[Concept] promises [X], yet delivers [opposite/unexpected].
Paint a vivid picture with unexpected actors or situations
A [unexpected person 1] does [X]. A [unexpected person 2] does [Y]. [Pattern/Insight].
Lead with a surprising number that demands explanation
[Surprising statistic]. Behind this number lies [deeper truth].
X has been important since ancient times.In today's world, X is very relevant.X is a topic of great significance.Since time immemorial, X has...X can be defined as...
"The first sentence tells the examiner who they're dealing with. A definition says 'average student.' A paradox says 'someone who thinks differently.' First impressions stick."
Foundation: Thesis + Roadmap
Your thesis is your promise to the reader - what you're going to prove. Your roadmap is the journey you'll take them on. Together, they set up your entire essay. A weak foundation means the examiner isn't sure where you're going.
Thesis without a position is just a topic sentence. Roadmap without anticipation is just a table of contents.
"this was result of people's dreams and their belief in it which led them to keep working towards this beautiful goal."
1 Crisp Stand
"The journey toward any significant achievement is driven not just by vision, but by the relentless belief in that vision."
Why it works: This statement clearly establishes a strong position while hinting at the essay's exploration of this idea.
2 Debatable Angle
"While some argue that success is solely determined by external circumstances, the belief in one's dreams is the true catalyst for action."
Why it works: This acknowledges a counter-view while firmly establishing the essay's main argument.
3 Sophisticated Balance
"Achieving our dreams requires not only belief but also an unwavering commitment to pursue them amidst obstacles."
Why it works: This presents a nuanced perspective, indicating the complexities involved in the relationship between belief and action.
Crisp Stand
Clear, direct position with analytical edge
Debatable Angle
Acknowledge counter-view, then take position
Sophisticated Balance
Embrace complexity with a nuanced position
"Not present"
1 Natural Flow
"This essay will explore how dreams motivate us, the necessary persistence required, and the potential dark sides of unbridled ambition."
Why it works: This sentence smoothly introduces what the reader can expect, creating anticipation.
2 Question-Based
"What motivates us to pursue our dreams, what role does persistence play, and when can dreaming become detrimental?"
Why it works: This format engages curiosity by posing questions that the essay will answer, effectively acting as a roadmap.
3 Thematic Preview
"Delving into historical examples, the nature of persistence, and the thin line between aspiration and folly, we uncover the complexity of dreams."
Why it works: This hints at the thematic structure without divulging too much detail, keeping readers intrigued.
Natural Flow
Weave structure into narrative without listing
Question-Based
Frame structure as questions to be answered
Thematic Preview
Drop intriguing references without explaining
Thesis: "A clear thesis tells the examiner 'I'm going to argue something.' This creates anticipation and gives them a lens to evaluate your essay. No thesis = no argument = lower marks."
Roadmap: "A good roadmap tells the examiner 'this essay is organized and going somewhere interesting.' A list tells them 'this student is mechanical.' Anticipation beats information."
The Opening Polish
Your introduction is the most scrutinized part of your essay. Every word matters. We'll teach you three style techniques that instantly elevate your opening: Parallelism, Antithesis, and Crescendo.
Introductions often suffer from 'playing it safe.' This is exactly when you need to take stylistic risks.
"The introduction shows potential, but language could be more engaging."
Parallelism
MissingAntithesis
MissingCrescendo
Missing"the future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams"
"the future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams"
"What if our dreams are the key to unlocking our potential?"
Parallelism
Repeating grammatical structure for rhythm and emphasis
Antithesis
Placing contrasting ideas in parallel structure to highlight tension
Crescendo
Building from small to large, quiet to loud, personal to universal
The Complete Transformation
See how all the elements come together. This is what a distinguished introduction looks like.
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Words Before118
Words Afterthe future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams. "Rome wasnt built in a day, but they were laying bricks every day". John Holmwood sayings shows how Rome which began as Coglomeration, later turned into state, eventually into Empire. this was result of people's dreams and their belief in it which led them to keep working towards this beautiful goal. we often inorder to fulfill a goal, look at the end result but missout on the most essential aspect of it i.e. believing in yourself and keep working for it. One who believes in his dream has a sense of motivation which leads his way towards future.
What if our dreams are the key to unlocking our potential? Just like Rome, which was not built in a day but laid brick by brick, our dreams require the same dedicated effort. This journey from mere aspiration to monumental achievement is fueled by unwavering belief. As we explore this essay, we will delve into historical examples of belief in dreams, the necessary persistence they entail, and the shadows cast by unbridled ambition.
hook
Introduced a compelling question to engage the reader.
thesis
Clarified the relationship between belief and accomplishment.
roadmap
Provided a clear overview of the sections to be discussed.
language
Enhanced the overall style and clarity.
Ideal Structure
- Hook (attention)
- Thesis (promise)
- Roadmap (anticipation)
Common Mistake
DefinitionVague statementList of sections
Most introductions are forgettable because they play it safe. Distinguished introductions take risks: provocative hooks, debatable theses, and roadmaps that tease.
First Impression Effect
The first paragraph colors the entire reading experience. Start strong and you're read generously.
Differentiation Signal
A unique opening signals 'this student is different.' The examiner pays more attention.
Thesis as Lens
A clear thesis gives the examiner a framework. Without it, they're lost and frustrated.
Anticipation Value
A good roadmap creates eagerness. The examiner looks forward to each section instead of dreading it.
Stage 1 Definition Writer
Focus: Stop opening with definitions
Goal: Recognize boring openings
Stage 2 Hook Crafter
Focus: Master 3 hook types
Goal: Grab attention consistently
Stage 3 Thesis Builder
Focus: State debatable positions
Goal: Make clear arguments
Stage 4 Master Opener
Focus: Integrate all elements with style
Goal: Unforgettable introductions