Performance Report
Instant information - wither education
Fair
47
/ 100
Overall Performance
Fair
Score Breakdown
Introduction
Hook, Thesis, Roadmap
40
/ 100
Hook: 25
Thesis: 60
Roadmap: 30
Essay Sections
Content, Strategy, Analysis
61
/ 100
Content: 73
Strategy: 32
Analytical: 65
Conclusion
Synthesis, Closure, Impact
30
/ 100
Synthesis: 40
Closure: 30
Forward Look: 20
Impact: 10
Language
Writing quality across all sections
60
/ 100
47 100
You made a standard attempt.
The student presents a conventional perspective on the impact of instant information on education, but lacks depth in analysis and fails to address critical sections as outlined in the Gold Standard Blueprint.
Insightful observations, but lacks structural depth—needs critical evaluations to excel.
Introduction
82 <<Count: 2 critical + 3 important + 1 suggested + 1 positive>>
Words: 82
Target: 60-100

Instant Information - whither education The present age is the Digital Age where data is and information is just a click away. Google, Youtube, Claude, Chat GPT along with online learning platforms like Byjus and Vedantu now provide instant access to information. This has its influence on the pedagogy, public awareness & overall growth of individuals. With rapid transformation in digital world, education as an institution struggles to find its ground. The COVID Pandemic presented a huge opportunity to test this correlation.

Instant Information - whither education The present age is the Digital Age where data is and information is just a click away. Google, Youtube, Claude, Chat GPT along with online learning platforms like Byjus and Vedantu now provide instant access to information. This has its influence on the pedagogy, public awareness & overall growth of individuals. With rapid transformation in digital world, education as an institution struggles to find its ground. The COVID Pandemic presented a huge opportunity to test this correlation.

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GAP: Impact of Instant Information on Learning — Introduce a dedicated section that critically evaluates how instant access affects students' learning habits and retention of knowledge. (This section is crucial for grounding your discussion in educational theory, ensuring that your argument is well-rounded and comprehensive.)
Positive Impacts of Instant Information
277 4 1
Words: 277
Target: 80-150

As physical learning stopped, digital education stepped in as a rescue. The surge in educational content & platforms opened a whole new dimension. While the influence of this 'infodemic' - massive in volume & speed of delivery - remains mixed, education as an institution remains resilient. It continues to adapt and evolve to changes in space & time. This essay seeks to explore the various impacts of this deluge of information on education - not just for children, but also for public (citizens) & working population. The dimensions of accessibility, affordability & adaptability are assessed. Additionally, the debilitating impacts on cognitive thinking, creative expression & ethical progression are explored. Instant information - a boon gone are the days of desperate hunting of textbooks in dingy libraries, where knowledge remained confined to dark corners of bookshelves. Modern digital age has democratized access to information to every hand. Every smartphone has a vast store of information that can open immense possibilities for a true learner. Consequently the quest for knowledge has been satisfied. Instant access to information has reduced time and effort in this process. Moreover, the use of AI, the new reality, in education has made education not just physically accessible but personalized. Such Tailored education seeks to redirect the efforts to right direction & enhance learning outcomes. India's PM-DISHA learning model is an innovative step in this direction that matches student's pace & learning abilities. Another major achievement is remote access to education, bridging regional divides & acted expansion of opportunities & capabilities. (Amartya Sen's capability approach is significant here.) However, the scenario is not as rosy as it seems when we look at the other side.

As physical learning stopped, digital education stepped in as a rescue. The surge in educational content & platforms opened a whole new dimension. While the influence of this 'infodemic' - massive in volume & speed of delivery - remains mixed, education as an institution remains resilient. It continues to adapt and evolve to changes in space & time. This essay seeks to explore the various impacts of this deluge of information on education - not just for children, but also for public (citizens) & working population. The dimensions of accessibility, affordability & adaptability are assessed. Additionally, the debilitating impacts on cognitive thinking, creative expression & ethical progression are explored. Instant information - a boon gone are the days of desperate hunting of textbooks in dingy libraries, where knowledge remained confined to dark corners of bookshelves. Modern digital age has democratized access to information to every hand. Every smartphone has a vast store of information that can open immense possibilities for a true learner. Consequently the quest for knowledge has been satisfied. Instant access to information has reduced time and effort in this process. Moreover, the use of AI, the new reality, in education has made education not just physically accessible but personalized. Such Tailored education seeks to redirect the efforts to right direction & enhance learning outcomes. India's PM-DISHA learning model is an innovative step in this direction that matches student's pace & learning abilities. Another major achievement is remote access to education, bridging regional divides & acted expansion of opportunities & capabilities. (Amartya Sen's capability approach is significant here.) However, the scenario is not as rosy as it seems when we look at the other side.

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NEEDS DEPTH: Positive Impacts of Instant Information — Expand upon the benefits by incorporating specific statistics on digital education growth and case studies of successful online learning. (Enhancing this section with empirical data and real-world examples will strengthen your argument, making it more credible and persuasive to the reader.)
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Negative Impacts of Instant Information
237 4 1
Words: 237
Target: 80-150

Instant information - an impediment to education & learning. As information becomes more handy, the learner becomes lazy & corrupt. The search for information on search bars never translates to actual knowledge. Deep reading, research, analytical thinking & practical application dwindle. These get replaced with shallow reading, scanning content and chose for breadth than depth. Consequently, human as Descartes 'Thinking Being' suffers irreversibly. Critical thinking skills are threatened by this ubiquitous information. Google is giving way to 'information heavy but stupid individuals', who consume all information passively. In addition, human as an artist is bowed down. The whole point of education, according to Rabindranath Tagore, is to enable creative self-expression. And instant information silences those inner voices amidst its loud noise. The supramentioned 'noise' of information is the new epidemic - 'the Infodemic'. It does not affect the respiratory system, rather the cognitive system. Symptoms of this disease are already visible - digital addiction, distraction & shortened attention span. Children & adults alike are confused recipients of this flood of dynamic information & have traded it with their cognitive abilities. The spread has not been limited to cognitive system but also to eyes (long screen time), heart (cardiovascular diseases due to stress & less physical activity) & socialization. Likewise, the society suffers due to social media conditioning, fake information & echo chambers. Polarized masses due to digital manipulated content is a roadblock to public education & awareness.

Instant information - an impediment to education & learning. As information becomes more handy, the learner becomes lazy & corrupt. The search for information on search bars never translates to actual knowledge. Deep reading, research, analytical thinking & practical application dwindle. These get replaced with shallow reading, scanning content and chose for breadth than depth. Consequently, human as Descartes 'Thinking Being' suffers irreversibly. Critical thinking skills are threatened by this ubiquitous information. Google is giving way to 'information heavy but stupid individuals', who consume all information passively. In addition, human as an artist is bowed down. The whole point of education, according to Rabindranath Tagore, is to enable creative self-expression. And instant information silences those inner voices amidst its loud noise. The supramentioned 'noise' of information is the new epidemic - 'the Infodemic'. It does not affect the respiratory system, rather the cognitive system. Symptoms of this disease are already visible - digital addiction, distraction & shortened attention span. Children & adults alike are confused recipients of this flood of dynamic information & have traded it with their cognitive abilities. The spread has not been limited to cognitive system but also to eyes (long screen time), heart (cardiovascular diseases due to stress & less physical activity) & socialization. Likewise, the society suffers due to social media conditioning, fake information & echo chambers. Polarized masses due to digital manipulated content is a roadblock to public education & awareness.

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NEEDS DEPTH: Negative Impacts of Instant Information — Include research studies on attention span and real-world examples of digital addiction to provide a more nuanced understanding of the challenges posed by instant information. (This addition will allow for a deeper exploration of the cognitive effects, making your analysis more robust and reflective of the complexities involved.)
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Broader Implications and Solutions
241 6 1
Words: 241
Target: 80-150

Similarly, the sheer dynamism of skills & innovative technological developments has outpaced the learning abilities of workers in the age of AI & job displacement. Beyond Textbooks - meaningful learning Education without character is a sin, according to Gandhiji. Emphasis on mere textual information while ignoring values & moral learning ignores the purpose of education. The silver line is that values & morals cannot be learned instantly, let alone digitally. It requires classroom interaction. Classroom learning environment, as increasingly being replaced, weakens human relationships - the source of value based learning. Instant education cannot teach the values of leadership, team work, empathy, discipline & mutual respect. Hence, it distances education itself from its receiver - emotionally & psychologically. Such an education, though materially rewarding, cannot produce 'happy' individuals & 'wise' citizens. A sustainable way ahead is to synthesize the digital, physical & emotional dimensions of education. Digital learning must act as a tool to be used judiciously. It must not replace cognitive effort, critical thinking & creative self- expression: All information must be actively scrutinized by human mind as an auditor - filtering out fake & manipulated noise. Instant Information must empower human & social capabilities through awareness, transparency & democratic access. It must also strive to upskill & train workers to achieve greater goals, rather than caging human minds. Thinking The modern digital world awaits for human beings to utilize all the opportunities while being mindful of traps & illusions.

Similarly, the sheer dynamism of skills & innovative technological developments has outpaced the learning abilities of workers in the age of AI & job displacement. Beyond Textbooks - meaningful learning Education without character is a sin, according to Gandhiji. Emphasis on mere textual information while ignoring values & moral learning ignores the purpose of education. The silver line is that values & morals cannot be learned instantly, let alone digitally. It requires classroom interaction. Classroom learning environment, as increasingly being replaced, weakens human relationships - the source of value based learning. Instant education cannot teach the values of leadership, team work, empathy, discipline & mutual respect. Hence, it distances education itself from its receiver - emotionally & psychologically. Such an education, though materially rewarding, cannot produce 'happy' individuals & 'wise' citizens. A sustainable way ahead is to synthesize the digital, physical & emotional dimensions of education. Digital learning must act as a tool to be used judiciously. It must not replace cognitive effort, critical thinking & creative self- expression: All information must be actively scrutinized by human mind as an auditor - filtering out fake & manipulated noise. Instant Information must empower human & social capabilities through awareness, transparency & democratic access. It must also strive to upskill & train workers to achieve greater goals, rather than caging human minds. Thinking The modern digital world awaits for human beings to utilize all the opportunities while being mindful of traps & illusions.

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VALID PIVOT: Broader Implications and Solutions — Retain this section but ensure it focuses on integrating digital and traditional methods more effectively, with examples of successful models. (This will ensure that your essay not only critiques the current landscape but also offers actionable insights, demonstrating a forward-thinking approach.)
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Conclusion
76 6
Words: 76
Target: 60-100

It requires classroom interaction. Classroom learning environment, as increasingly being replaced, weakens human relationships - the source of value based learning. Instant education cannot teach the values of leadership, team work, empathy, discipline & mutual respect. Hence, it distances education itself from its receiver - emotionally & psychologically. Such an education, though materially rewarding, cannot produce 'happy' individuals & 'wise' citizens. A sustainable way ahead is to synthesize the digital, physical & emotional dimensions of education.

It requires classroom interaction. Classroom learning environment, as increasingly being replaced, weakens human relationships - the source of value based learning. Instant education cannot teach the values of leadership, team work, empathy, discipline & mutual respect. Hence, it distances education itself from its receiver - emotionally & psychologically. Such an education, though materially rewarding, cannot produce 'happy' individuals & 'wise' citizens. A sustainable way ahead is to synthesize the digital, physical & emotional dimensions of education.

Expand the analysis in both the positive and negative impacts of instant information, introduce a critical evaluation section, and ensure solutions are actionable and grounded in real-world examples.
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40/100 Needs Work
Introduction Analysis
The Art of First Impressions

Your introduction is your one chance to make the examiner want to read more. Think of it as a movie trailer: grab attention, make a promise, and create anticipation. Most students start with definitions - the essay equivalent of 'once upon a time.' Distinguished essays start with intrigue.

The Impact of Instant Information on Education Introduction
40/100 Developing
25
Hook (S01)
60
Thesis (S02)
30
Roadmap (S03)
40
Language
Professor's Remark

"The introduction has some relevant content but lacks a compelling hook and clear thesis alignment."

What I Liked

"You accurately identify the digital age's influence on education."

What I Found Weak

"The opening fails to engage the reader effectively and lacks clarity in presenting the main argument."

What Would Push Higher

"Incorporating a stronger hook, refining the thesis statement, and improving the roadmap could enhance the introduction dramatically."

Your Introduction Ingredients
Current: A vague statement on instant information and its impact.
Target: Hook + Thesis + Roadmap
You Have:
  • A mention of instant information
  • Reference to education
You Need:
  • A compelling hook that engages the reader Hook
  • A clear thesis statement presenting a debatable position Thesis
  • An engaging roadmap outlining the key themes Roadmap
Great introductions capture interest and outline the essay's purpose—strive to create a starting point that is both engaging and informative.
The Hook: Your First 10 Words

The hook is your opening punch. It should make the examiner's eyebrows rise, create a question in their mind, or present a tension that demands resolution. Definitions don't do this. Questions, paradoxes, and vivid scenarios do.

Most students start with 'X has been important since ancient times.' This is true but boring. Your hook should be surprising, not safe.

Hook Score (S01) 25/100
Your Hook Attempt Sentence 1

"Instant Information - whither education"

No Hook Detected
Effectiveness: The current hook tries to spark curiosity but lacks clarity and urgency, making it forgettable.
What's Missing: It doesn't effectively engage the reader or present a compelling scenario or question.
Choose an alternative
Hook Alternatives
1 Provocative Question

"Is instant access to information empowering or undermining our educational foundations?"

Why it works: This question challenges the reader's perspective and invites them to consider the implications of the topic.

2 Paradox Hook

"In a world where knowledge is just a click away, are we learning less than ever?"

Why it works: This statement presents a thought-provoking contradiction that intrigues the reader to explore the topic further.

3 Scenario Hook

"Imagine a student at their desk surrounded by endless resources yet struggling to comprehend the simplest concepts."

Why it works: This scenario paints a vivid image and raises questions about the effectiveness of instant information in education.

What Changed: The hook would shift from a vague statement to engaging questions or scenarios that pique interest.

Hook Types Reference

Ask a question that challenges assumptions or creates intellectual tension

Template:
In an age of [modern reality], why do [surprising behavior/belief] persist?
When to use: When your topic has a modern vs. traditional tension
Memory Hook: Make the examiner's brain itch with a question it wants answered.

Present a contradiction that creates cognitive dissonance

Template:
[Concept] promises [X], yet delivers [opposite/unexpected].
When to use: When your topic has inherent tensions or contradictions
Memory Hook: Paradox = Intellectual tension. The reader must read on to resolve it.

Paint a vivid picture with unexpected actors or situations

Template:
A [unexpected person 1] does [X]. A [unexpected person 2] does [Y]. [Pattern/Insight].
When to use: When concrete examples create surprise
Memory Hook: Show, don't tell. Concrete images beat abstract statements.

Lead with a surprising number that demands explanation

Template:
[Surprising statistic]. Behind this number lies [deeper truth].
When to use: When you have a genuinely surprising data point
Memory Hook: Numbers shock when they contradict expectations.
Weak Openings to Avoid
  • X has been important since ancient times.
  • In today's world, X is very relevant.
  • X is a topic of great significance.
  • Since time immemorial, X has...
  • X can be defined as...
Examiner Psychology

"The first sentence tells the examiner who they're dealing with. A definition says 'average student.' A paradox says 'someone who thinks differently.' First impressions stick."

Foundation: Thesis + Roadmap

Your thesis is your promise to the reader - what you're going to prove. Your roadmap is the journey you'll take them on. Together, they set up your entire essay. A weak foundation means the examiner isn't sure where you're going.

Thesis without a position is just a topic sentence. Roadmap without anticipation is just a table of contents.

Thesis Score (S02) 60/100
Your Thesis Attempt Sentence 3

"This has its influence on the pedagogy, public awareness & overall growth of individuals."

Effectiveness: The thesis touches on relevant points but lacks a clear, debatable position for readers to engage with.
What's Missing: It should state a more definitive stance or argument regarding the impact of instant information on education.
Thesis Upgrades
1 Crisp Stand

"While instant information enhances educational accessibility, it ultimately challenges traditional pedagogical methods."

Why it works: This statement clearly asserts a position that can be debated and provides a focused direction for the essay.

2 Debatable Angle

"The rise of instant information poses both opportunities and threats to educational practices, necessitating a careful analysis."

Why it works: This acknowledges the complexity of the issue and engages the reader in considering multiple viewpoints.

3 Sophisticated Balance

"Instant access to information revolutionizes education, yet it risks oversimplifying the learning process, demanding an integrative approach."

Why it works: This captures the nuanced balance between positive and negative impacts, suggesting further discussion in the body.

What Changed: Transforming the thesis to present a clear, debatable position enhances clarity and direction.

Thesis Types Reference
Crisp Stand

Clear, direct position with analytical edge

Template: [X] is [position] because [reason that can be debated].
If no one could disagree, it's not a thesis.
Debatable Angle

Acknowledge counter-view, then take position

Template: While critics argue [counter-view], this essay contends [your position].
Show you know the debate, then pick a side.
Sophisticated Balance

Embrace complexity with a nuanced position

Template: [X] is both [A] and [opposite of A] - and [implication of this duality].
Nuance signals intellectual maturity.
Roadmap Score (S03) 30/100
Your Roadmap Attempt Sentence 4

"With rapid transformation in digital world, education as an institution struggles to find its ground."

Effectiveness: The roadmap suggests a theme but does not sufficiently outline the structure or raise curiosity about the content.
What's Missing: It should preview key sections in a way that entices readers to continue exploring the arguments.
Roadmap Upgrades
1 Natural Flow

"As we explore positive impacts, we must also confront the challenges posed by digital learning, paving the way for a balanced educational future."

Why it works: This transition directly links the thesis to the essay's structure, generating anticipation for what's to come.

2 Question-Based

"How does instant information assist in learning, while also presenting pitfalls that need addressing?"

Why it works: This framing sets the stage for the core sections, provoking thought and curiosity.

3 Thematic Preview

"This essay will delve into the benefits of accessibility, the challenges to cognitive skills, and strategies for a balanced educational approach."

Why it works: By thematically previewing the main arguments, it provides a clear roadmap while maintaining interest.

What Changed: A more engaging roadmap would create anticipation for the body paragraphs and effectively tie back to the thesis.

Roadmap Types Reference
Natural Flow

Weave structure into narrative without listing

Template: To understand [theme], we must first [section 1], then [section 2], and finally [section 3 with tension].
Hide the list inside a story.
Question-Based

Frame structure as questions to be answered

Template: Three questions guide this inquiry: [Q1]? [Q2]? [Q3]?
Questions create curiosity. Readers want answers.
Thematic Preview

Drop intriguing references without explaining

Template: From [intriguing reference 1] to [intriguing reference 2] - this essay maps [terrain].
Tease, don't spoil. Make them want to know more.
Examiner Psychology

Thesis: "A clear thesis tells the examiner 'I'm going to argue something.' This creates anticipation and gives them a lens to evaluate your essay. No thesis = no argument = lower marks."

Roadmap: "A good roadmap tells the examiner 'this essay is organized and going somewhere interesting.' A list tells them 'this student is mechanical.' Anticipation beats information."

The Opening Polish

Your introduction is the most scrutinized part of your essay. Every word matters. We'll teach you three style techniques that instantly elevate your opening: Parallelism, Antithesis, and Crescendo.

Introductions often suffer from 'playing it safe.' This is exactly when you need to take stylistic risks.

Language Score 40/100
Examiner's First Impression

"The language is somewhat functional but lacks sophistication."

Style Techniques Check
Parallelism
Missing
Your attempt: "Not present"
Enhanced version: "This digital transformation shapes not just knowledge but also skills and attitudes in education."
Antithesis
Missing
Your attempt: "Not present"
Enhanced version: "While knowledge is plentiful, understanding is often elusive."
Crescendo
Partial
Your attempt: "Not present"
Enhanced version: "The digital age offers unprecedented access to information, yet it simultaneously reinforces a cycle of misinformation."
Sentence Transformation Ladder
Sentence 2
Original:
"Google, Youtube, Claude, Chat GPT along with online learning platforms like Byjus and Vedantu now provide instant access to information."
Good "Platforms such as Google, YouTube, and various online learning tools provide immediate access to information."
Better "Sites like Google and YouTube, alongside innovative platforms such as Byjus and Vedantu, facilitate immediate access to a vast pool of information."
Best "As digital titans like Google and YouTube, along with leading educational platforms Byjus and Vedantu, unveil vast reservoirs of information at our fingertips, the landscape of learning is irrevocably transformed."
The revisions enhance clarity, sophistication, and engagement while providing specific references to the impact of the digital age.
The Power Opener
Original

"Instant Information - whither education"

Diagnosis: It's vague and lacks context.
Power Version

"In a world where every question leads to instant answers, how are our educational foundations affected?"

Techniques used: Provocative Question Engaging Scenario
Style Technique Reference
Parallelism

Repeating grammatical structure for rhythm and emphasis

Example: "Faith consoles the grieving, binds the community, and challenges the policy-maker."
Template: [Subject] [verb 1] the [object 1], [verb 2] the [object 2], and [verb 3] the [object 3].
Think triplets: THREE parallel phrases hit harder than two.
Antithesis

Placing contrasting ideas in parallel structure to highlight tension

Example: "Science asks how; faith asks why. The modern mind needs both questions."
Template: [X] does [A]; [Y] does [opposite of A]. [Resolution/implication].
Antithesis = Intellectual tension. Find the BUT in your topic.
Crescendo

Building from small to large, quiet to loud, personal to universal

Example: "From whispered prayers to temple bells to the roar of pilgrim millions - faith scales from intimate to immense."
Template: From [small/personal] to [medium] to [large/universal] - [insight].
Crescendo = Volume up. Start whisper, end thunderclap.
The Complete Transformation

See how all the elements come together. This is what a distinguished introduction looks like.

82

Words Before

115

Words After
Your Original Introduction

Instant Information - whither education The present age is the Digital Age where data is and information is just a click away. Google, Youtube, Claude, Chat GPT along with online learning platforms like Byjus and Vedantu now provide instant access to information. This has its influence on the pedagogy, public awareness & overall growth of individuals. With rapid transformation in digital world, education as an institution struggles to find its ground. The COVID Pandemic presented a huge opportunity to test this correlation.

Transformation Applied
Distinguished Introduction

In a world where every question leads to instant answers, how are our educational foundations affected? The Digital Age, characterized by platforms like Google and YouTube, has revolutionized the access to information and fundamentally altered our learning dynamics. This instant influx of information influences not only traditional teaching methods but also enhances public awareness and personal growth. However, as we delve into this digital renaissance, we must confront the pressing challenges faced by educational institutions grappling with these transformations, especially illustrated during the COVID pandemic.

What Changed in Each Layer
hook

A thought-provoking question was introduced to engage the reader.

thesis

The thesis was revised to present a clear stance on the topic.

roadmap

The roadmap now previews the key themes of the essay while raising anticipation.

language

The language was enriched for clarity and engagement with specific terminology.

Introduction Structure Blueprint
Ideal Structure
  1. Hook (attention)
  2. Thesis (promise)
  3. Roadmap (anticipation)
Common Mistake
  1. Definition
  2. Vague statement
  3. List of sections

Most introductions are forgettable because they play it safe. Distinguished introductions take risks: provocative hooks, debatable theses, and roadmaps that tease.

Inside the Examiner's Mind
First Impression Effect

The first paragraph colors the entire reading experience. Start strong and you're read generously.

Differentiation Signal

A unique opening signals 'this student is different.' The examiner pays more attention.

Thesis as Lens

A clear thesis gives the examiner a framework. Without it, they're lost and frustrated.

Anticipation Value

A good roadmap creates eagerness. The examiner looks forward to each section instead of dreading it.

Your Growth Journey
Stage 1 Definition Writer

Focus: Stop opening with definitions

Goal: Recognize boring openings

Week 1-2
Stage 2 Hook Crafter

Focus: Master 3 hook types

Goal: Grab attention consistently

Week 3-4
Stage 3 Thesis Builder

Focus: State debatable positions

Goal: Make clear arguments

Week 5-6
Stage 4 Master Opener

Focus: Integrate all elements with style

Goal: Unforgettable introductions

Week 7+
End of introduction analysis