When two elephants fight it is the grass that get trampled
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When two elephants fight it is the grass that get trampled
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Introduction
Section-A Q4 When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled. Elephants in mythology and in general are considered to be symbolising wealth and majestic power. They indicate positive growth and prosperity. But when majestic creatures of positivity fight each other what suffers is the positivity they stand for affecting the ground of grass they stand on. The grass here can refer to the positivity, peace, accountability, dignity, transparency, humanity which suffers when two bigger powers stand against each other, making the destruction evasive and destructive of very grounding realities.
Section-A Q4 When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled. Elephants in mythology and in general are considered to be symbolising wealth and majestic power. They indicate positive growth and prosperity. But when majestic creatures of positivity fight each other what suffers is the positivity they stand for affecting the ground of grass they stand on. The grass here can refer to the positivity, peace, accountability, dignity, transparency, humanity which suffers when two bigger powers stand against each other, making the destruction evasive and destructive of very grounding realities.
Political and Economic Conflicts
This principle applies on political, social, economic and cultural. Issues which we face today not just in India but also in the world. In a political sphere, on an international front the intense wars between USA and Iran, Israel and Palestine, Ukraine and Russia, for power and resources and strategic wars among the developed to conquer the world has at the end of the days suffered sovereignty, peace, basic mutual respect that every country and every human or a citizen is entitled to have. But in the contrary the consequence of such wars have been bloodshed, loss of forest, growing agony. At the domestic front, in India the engulfing disputes among and between the Judiciary and Executive like Judiciary considering the interference of executive in the appointment process and judicial overreach or activism to be unjust and the executive feeling that Judiciary is impacting the governance process through certain judgements, impacts constitutionalism, ideals of the preamble and the basic governance which the people must enjoy. The recent issue over the jurisdiction and powers on ED [Enforcement Directorate] where the Judiciary limited and questioned its functions to limit politicisation is a best example where at end of the day, transparency and fundamental rights of life and liberty of the citizens suffer. In an economic sphere, on the international front, the issues between the developed and the developing countries over grouping issues of the world like climate finance, trade feasibility and peaceful navigation and equitable trade are constantly being politicised and leading to unfair means of economic growth and development. The politicisation of UNSC over permanent membership for holding economic and political supremacy by the permanent members/developed countries. The WTO battle, the overarching discriminative practices like Carbon Border Tax by EU are impacting the livelihoods of common people. On the domestic front, increasing corruption over privatisation of resources and the battle between the Government and the private companies over control of resources. are at the end of the day impacting traditional industries. The corruption in PPP model of infrastructure, the inequitable development and economic growth of states are finally impacting the dignity and rights of common people. The recent water sharing disputes between states or among states for economic gains like Cauvery dispute, Narmada basin dispute are impacting the livelihood and the right to freedom of business of people leading to farmer suicides, land acquisition, loss of traditional industries, increasing poverty and so on.
This principle applies on political, social, economic and cultural. Issues which we face today not just in India but also in the world. In a political sphere, on an international front the intense wars between USA and Iran, Israel and Palestine, Ukraine and Russia, for power and resources and strategic wars among the developed to conquer the world has at the end of the days suffered sovereignty, peace, basic mutual respect that every country and every human or a citizen is entitled to have. But in the contrary the consequence of such wars have been bloodshed, loss of forest, growing agony. At the domestic front, in India the engulfing disputes among and between the Judiciary and Executive like Judiciary considering the interference of executive in the appointment process and judicial overreach or activism to be unjust and the executive feeling that Judiciary is impacting the governance process through certain judgements, impacts constitutionalism, ideals of the preamble and the basic governance which the people must enjoy. The recent issue over the jurisdiction and powers on ED [Enforcement Directorate] where the Judiciary limited and questioned its functions to limit politicisation is a best example where at end of the day, transparency and fundamental rights of life and liberty of the citizens suffer. In an economic sphere, on the international front, the issues between the developed and the developing countries over grouping issues of the world like climate finance, trade feasibility and peaceful navigation and equitable trade are constantly being politicised and leading to unfair means of economic growth and development. The politicisation of UNSC over permanent membership for holding economic and political supremacy by the permanent members/developed countries. The WTO battle, the overarching discriminative practices like Carbon Border Tax by EU are impacting the livelihoods of common people. On the domestic front, increasing corruption over privatisation of resources and the battle between the Government and the private companies over control of resources. are at the end of the day impacting traditional industries. The corruption in PPP model of infrastructure, the inequitable development and economic growth of states are finally impacting the dignity and rights of common people. The recent water sharing disputes between states or among states for economic gains like Cauvery dispute, Narmada basin dispute are impacting the livelihood and the right to freedom of business of people leading to farmer suicides, land acquisition, loss of traditional industries, increasing poverty and so on.
Social and Cultural Conflicts
In the social sphere at the international front the fights between racial of whites and blacks, the developed and developing countries over responsibility of climate change impacting all, the battle between sharing of data over sensitive scientific developments like vaccines for humanity impacts the liberty and Justice for people. The recent immigration policy of US and other European countries to call other immigrants are criminals and aliens impact the liberty, freedom and justice for individuals and organisation and more for livelihoods. On the domestic front the battle between economic development and environmental conservation like the recent Nicobar project in Andaman and Nicobar, the Azarvalli Judgement to allow mining are impacting the rights of tribal groups, and dignity and safety of people. In the cultural sphere, on the international front, the growth disagreements over religious issues like war between Israel and Palestine, Indonesia and Cambodia, the Shia states and Israel, Iran and the Sunni Persian states are finally impacting the unity, peace and dignity of people. On the domestic front, the ideological conflicts over religious ideas, the recent issues of claims on Hindu temples under mosques, seeking demolition and minority institutional rights and affects communal harmony and unity among people. These conflicts between ideologies, quest for power, economic dominance are like two elephants fighting with no end and finally the grass, that is the peace, harmony, unity, transparency, accountability and dignity being impacted.
In the social sphere at the international front the fights between racial of whites and blacks, the developed and developing countries over responsibility of climate change impacting all, the battle between sharing of data over sensitive scientific developments like vaccines for humanity impacts the liberty and Justice for people. The recent immigration policy of US and other European countries to call other immigrants are criminals and aliens impact the liberty, freedom and justice for individuals and organisation and more for livelihoods. On the domestic front the battle between economic development and environmental conservation like the recent Nicobar project in Andaman and Nicobar, the Azarvalli Judgement to allow mining are impacting the rights of tribal groups, and dignity and safety of people. In the cultural sphere, on the international front, the growth disagreements over religious issues like war between Israel and Palestine, Indonesia and Cambodia, the Shia states and Israel, Iran and the Sunni Persian states are finally impacting the unity, peace and dignity of people. On the domestic front, the ideological conflicts over religious ideas, the recent issues of claims on Hindu temples under mosques, seeking demolition and minority institutional rights and affects communal harmony and unity among people. These conflicts between ideologies, quest for power, economic dominance are like two elephants fighting with no end and finally the grass, that is the peace, harmony, unity, transparency, accountability and dignity being impacted.
Conclusion
Prioritising the principles of peace and harmony over destruction would lead to a better future for not just development but could save the world from the destruction caused when two powers like the elephants fight.
Prioritising the principles of peace and harmony over destruction would lead to a better future for not just development but could save the world from the destruction caused when two powers like the elephants fight.
The Art of First Impressions
Your introduction is your one chance to make the examiner want to read more. Think of it as a movie trailer: grab attention, make a promise, and create anticipation. Most students start with definitions - the essay equivalent of 'once upon a time.' Distinguished essays start with intrigue.
"The introduction presents the topic, but lacks a strong engaging hook and a clear roadmap to guide the reader."
"The metaphor of the elephants and grass is a creative approach to representing conflict's impact."
"The hook is weak and the thesis does not clearly express a specific position."
"Rework the hook to be more engaging, clarify the thesis to present a debatable argument, and include a roadmap outlining key points."
You Have:
- Metaphor
- Theme exploration
You Need:
- Engaging hook Hook
- Clear thesis statement Thesis
- Roadmap of discussion points Roadmap
The Hook: Your First 10 Words
The hook is your opening punch. It should make the examiner's eyebrows rise, create a question in their mind, or present a tension that demands resolution. Definitions don't do this. Questions, paradoxes, and vivid scenarios do.
Most students start with 'X has been important since ancient times.' This is true but boring. Your hook should be surprising, not safe.
"When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled."
1 Provocative Question
"What happens to the voiceless when the powerful clash?"
Why it works: It invites readers to think critically about the consequences of conflict on the vulnerable.
2 Paradox Hook
"In a struggle for dominance, it is often the innocent who bear the brunt of power."
Why it works: This draws attention to the irony of powerful entities causing widespread harm to those who are defenseless.
3 Scenario Hook
"Imagine a battlefield where the titans clash, leaving devastation in their wake, while the forgotten grass lies in ruin."
Why it works: This paints a vivid picture, setting the stage for a discussion on impacts that might be overlooked.
Ask a question that challenges assumptions or creates intellectual tension
In an age of [modern reality], why do [surprising behavior/belief] persist?
Present a contradiction that creates cognitive dissonance
[Concept] promises [X], yet delivers [opposite/unexpected].
Paint a vivid picture with unexpected actors or situations
A [unexpected person 1] does [X]. A [unexpected person 2] does [Y]. [Pattern/Insight].
Lead with a surprising number that demands explanation
[Surprising statistic]. Behind this number lies [deeper truth].
X has been important since ancient times.In today's world, X is very relevant.X is a topic of great significance.Since time immemorial, X has...X can be defined as...
"The first sentence tells the examiner who they're dealing with. A definition says 'average student.' A paradox says 'someone who thinks differently.' First impressions stick."
Foundation: Thesis + Roadmap
Your thesis is your promise to the reader - what you're going to prove. Your roadmap is the journey you'll take them on. Together, they set up your entire essay. A weak foundation means the examiner isn't sure where you're going.
Thesis without a position is just a topic sentence. Roadmap without anticipation is just a table of contents.
"The grass here can refer to the positivity, peace, accountability, dignity, transparency, humanity which suffers when two bigger powers stand against each other."
1 Crisp Stand
"When powerful entities engage in conflict, it is society's foundational values that are ultimately compromised."
Why it works: This position clearly reflects a stance that can be debated, drawing attention to the societal consequences.
2 Debatable Angle
"The battle between two major powers not only reveals their struggle but also highlights the vulnerability of the societal frameworks that cling to peace and accountability."
Why it works: Acknowledging the complexity of views on power dynamics leads to a richer discussion.
3 Sophisticated Balance
"While clashes of power can foster change, they invariably trample the essential values that uphold society's dignity and humanity."
Why it works: This statement acknowledges nuance while presenting a debatable perspective.
Crisp Stand
Clear, direct position with analytical edge
Debatable Angle
Acknowledge counter-view, then take position
Sophisticated Balance
Embrace complexity with a nuanced position
"Not present"
1 Natural Flow
"This essay will explore the impact of political, economic, and social conflicts, emphasizing the toll they take on our core values."
Why it works: This forms a cohesive connection to the thesis while hinting at key areas of discussion.
2 Question-Based
"What dynamics are at play when power conflicts arise, and how do they affect societal norms?"
Why it works: This engages the reader's curiosity and sets a foundation for the subsequent exploration.
3 Thematic Preview
"Diving into various dimensions of conflict, this essay will illuminate the intricate relationship between power struggles and societal well-being."
Why it works: This thematic outline keeps the reader intrigued while guiding them through the essay's discussion points.
Natural Flow
Weave structure into narrative without listing
Question-Based
Frame structure as questions to be answered
Thematic Preview
Drop intriguing references without explaining
Thesis: "A clear thesis tells the examiner 'I'm going to argue something.' This creates anticipation and gives them a lens to evaluate your essay. No thesis = no argument = lower marks."
Roadmap: "A good roadmap tells the examiner 'this essay is organized and going somewhere interesting.' A list tells them 'this student is mechanical.' Anticipation beats information."
The Opening Polish
Your introduction is the most scrutinized part of your essay. Every word matters. We'll teach you three style techniques that instantly elevate your opening: Parallelism, Antithesis, and Crescendo.
Introductions often suffer from 'playing it safe.' This is exactly when you need to take stylistic risks.
"The language is generally clear, but lacks engagement and sophistication."
Parallelism
MissingAntithesis
MissingCrescendo
Missing"But when majestic creatures of positivity fight each other what suffers is the positivity they stand for affecting the ground of grass they stand on."
"When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled."
"When titans clash, it is the innocent who suffer in silence, a poignant reminder of the collateral damage inherent in power struggles."
Parallelism
Repeating grammatical structure for rhythm and emphasis
Antithesis
Placing contrasting ideas in parallel structure to highlight tension
Crescendo
Building from small to large, quiet to loud, personal to universal
The Complete Transformation
See how all the elements come together. This is what a distinguished introduction looks like.
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Words AfterWhen two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled. Elephants in mythology and in general are considered to be symbolising wealth and majestic power. They indicate positive growth and prosperity. But when majestic creatures of positivity fight each other what suffers is the positivity they stand for affecting the ground of grass they stand on.
What happens to the voiceless when the powerful clash? Elephants, revered symbols of wealth and majesty in both myth and reality, embody the essence of growth and prosperity. Yet, during their titanic conflicts, it is the very values of peace, dignity, and humanity that crumble beneath their might. This essay will explore how political, economic, and social conflicts compromise these foundational principles.
hook
Added a provocative question to engage the reader.
thesis
Clarified the position regarding societal impacts.
roadmap
Included a preview of key discussion areas.
language
Enhanced language for clarity and engagement.
Ideal Structure
- Hook (attention)
- Thesis (promise)
- Roadmap (anticipation)
Common Mistake
DefinitionVague statementList of sections
Most introductions are forgettable because they play it safe. Distinguished introductions take risks: provocative hooks, debatable theses, and roadmaps that tease.
First Impression Effect
The first paragraph colors the entire reading experience. Start strong and you're read generously.
Differentiation Signal
A unique opening signals 'this student is different.' The examiner pays more attention.
Thesis as Lens
A clear thesis gives the examiner a framework. Without it, they're lost and frustrated.
Anticipation Value
A good roadmap creates eagerness. The examiner looks forward to each section instead of dreading it.
Stage 1 Definition Writer
Focus: Stop opening with definitions
Goal: Recognize boring openings
Stage 2 Hook Crafter
Focus: Master 3 hook types
Goal: Grab attention consistently
Stage 3 Thesis Builder
Focus: State debatable positions
Goal: Make clear arguments
Stage 4 Master Opener
Focus: Integrate all elements with style
Goal: Unforgettable introductions