When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled
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When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled
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Introduction
When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled. The above aphorism was reflecting today's global position. As world became an global village, interdependence of west and East where action's of one's has consequences faced by world wide. Recent, Russia-Ukraine war was an classic example of it. The war between two countries but consequences of it is not only limited to both.
When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled. The above aphorism was reflecting today's global position. As world became an global village, interdependence of west and East where action's of one's has consequences faced by world wide. Recent, Russia-Ukraine war was an classic example of it. The war between two countries but consequences of it is not only limited to both.
Geopolitical Consequences of Conflicts
It's vulnerability particularly faced by small and least developed countries. The rising oil prices, geopolitical vulnerability, led to Inflation impact in Import dependent countries like India, of Asian-African. The fight between two has trampled the growth and development of small countries who have no direct connection with both. Same as grass trampled due to fight between two elephants. Even before Globalisation, the small countries are got trampled between fight of two superpowers USA and USSR by forming allies with small countries exploiting their Human resources, Natural resources, Economic Resources consequently. led them behind in the race of Development. The two world wars of 20th century has devastating effect for entire world. The war left with no winners only left with Millions of victims. The Hirosima & Nagasaki (Japan) attack by USA led to end of war, but also trampled 300,000 + civilian of the Japanese state. Similarly the Seven year of war between England and French for their capitalist intent drag small countries as their colonies into war and trampled their Economic, (Economic Drain), glorious Past (Ex.
It's vulnerability particularly faced by small and least developed countries. The rising oil prices, geopolitical vulnerability, led to Inflation impact in Import dependent countries like India, of Asian-African. The fight between two has trampled the growth and development of small countries who have no direct connection with both. Same as grass trampled due to fight between two elephants. Even before Globalisation, the small countries are got trampled between fight of two superpowers USA and USSR by forming allies with small countries exploiting their Human resources, Natural resources, Economic Resources consequently. led them behind in the race of Development. The two world wars of 20th century has devastating effect for entire world. The war left with no winners only left with Millions of victims. The Hirosima & Nagasaki (Japan) attack by USA led to end of war, but also trampled 300,000 + civilian of the Japanese state. Similarly the Seven year of war between England and French for their capitalist intent drag small countries as their colonies into war and trampled their Economic, (Economic Drain), glorious Past (Ex.
Historical Context of Wars
India from golden sparrow to Hungry sparrow). Hence, the Personal Interest over the Public Interest makes elephants blinds to see happiness of majority. For example the personal intent of hitler of Rule of Nazi killed millions Jews. The Berighosha policy of Ashoka for Expansion of his empire led devastating war such as Kailangana war where he trampled thousands of millions soldiers. The grasses are tramp not only trampled in fights and Battles but also get trampled indirectly or invisibly as done by chinas Debt trap policy giving economic support at times in crisis crisis to the small countries (Sri lanka, Pakistan) and manipulating its own self interest (china's silk road initiative) by trampling interest of other countries. Even in corporate world the Price war between two giant companies although it's initially beneficial for consumers but led to trampled small companies and retailers For example. JIO's free Internet in 2016's led to closer of many small telephony companies in India. The war for development has trampled the Environment and Animal Kingdom. The fruits of development & technological advancements was sweet for developed countries like USA but was bitter for underdeveloped or lest developed countries like African countries, Asian countries who facing natural calamities like cyclone, depleting rainfall, increasing sea level (survival question for Maldives, Kiribati Island) etc. The Recent Nepal's Glacier Lake Outburst Flood was an red light examples of how development activities of China led to trampled the thousands of people in Nepal. However, it is not always to unjustify the war or fight. The war of Mahabharat has justified the war for Righteousness of the Karma and for the Larger Public Interest (Dharma). Similarly, the war for Independence led by French People (French revolution), American People (American war of Independence), Indian Nationalist against British Colonism etc where grasses where not trampled but became empowered of their strength of unity.
India from golden sparrow to Hungry sparrow). Hence, the Personal Interest over the Public Interest makes elephants blinds to see happiness of majority. For example the personal intent of hitler of Rule of Nazi killed millions Jews. The Berighosha policy of Ashoka for Expansion of his empire led devastating war such as Kailangana war where he trampled thousands of millions soldiers. The grasses are tramp not only trampled in fights and Battles but also get trampled indirectly or invisibly as done by chinas Debt trap policy giving economic support at times in crisis crisis to the small countries (Sri lanka, Pakistan) and manipulating its own self interest (china's silk road initiative) by trampling interest of other countries. Even in corporate world the Price war between two giant companies although it's initially beneficial for consumers but led to trampled small companies and retailers For example. JIO's free Internet in 2016's led to closer of many small telephony companies in India. The war for development has trampled the Environment and Animal Kingdom. The fruits of development & technological advancements was sweet for developed countries like USA but was bitter for underdeveloped or lest developed countries like African countries, Asian countries who facing natural calamities like cyclone, depleting rainfall, increasing sea level (survival question for Maldives, Kiribati Island) etc. The Recent Nepal's Glacier Lake Outburst Flood was an red light examples of how development activities of China led to trampled the thousands of people in Nepal. However, it is not always to unjustify the war or fight. The war of Mahabharat has justified the war for Righteousness of the Karma and for the Larger Public Interest (Dharma). Similarly, the war for Independence led by French People (French revolution), American People (American war of Independence), Indian Nationalist against British Colonism etc where grasses where not trampled but became empowered of their strength of unity.
The Nature of War and Public Interest
It was also seen in geopolitics in the form of Non - Alignment Movement, led by developing countries (India, Indonesia) against the allies of two super powers. The formation of Union of small African countries has strengthen their voice in International Organisation (UN, WTO etc) Moreover, the strength of grass lies in the roots, soil, water, however the strength of elephants lies itself it in the grass. Grass can live without elephants and elephants need grasses for their development. Likewise the developed countries of west (England, USA,) became developed and prosperous by the human resources of the East, Natural resources, market etc of the East. For example. Europe became colonist power or Industrialist Capitalist power due to resource extraction from the Asian-Afro countries. Hence, war has or conflicts has devastating consequences however avoidance of it has also has limits as said by Gautam Buddha 'Patience has limits'. The terrorist attack of Pahalgam, Pulwama, twin tower of America when the answer has to be give regressively. It is also stated by Gandhiji, war for national interest or to defend the interest of Nation citizens is a Dharma war (quoted from Gita). Although war should be last resort (Just war theory) after taking peaceful methods diplomatically, Economic sanctions, Bilateral - Multilateral talks etc to enhance the peaceful co-existence and co-development of Elephants and grasses.
It was also seen in geopolitics in the form of Non - Alignment Movement, led by developing countries (India, Indonesia) against the allies of two super powers. The formation of Union of small African countries has strengthen their voice in International Organisation (UN, WTO etc) Moreover, the strength of grass lies in the roots, soil, water, however the strength of elephants lies itself it in the grass. Grass can live without elephants and elephants need grasses for their development. Likewise the developed countries of west (England, USA,) became developed and prosperous by the human resources of the East, Natural resources, market etc of the East. For example. Europe became colonist power or Industrialist Capitalist power due to resource extraction from the Asian-Afro countries. Hence, war has or conflicts has devastating consequences however avoidance of it has also has limits as said by Gautam Buddha 'Patience has limits'. The terrorist attack of Pahalgam, Pulwama, twin tower of America when the answer has to be give regressively. It is also stated by Gandhiji, war for national interest or to defend the interest of Nation citizens is a Dharma war (quoted from Gita). Although war should be last resort (Just war theory) after taking peaceful methods diplomatically, Economic sanctions, Bilateral - Multilateral talks etc to enhance the peaceful co-existence and co-development of Elephants and grasses.
Conclusion
When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled. The above aphorism was reflecting today's global position. As world became an global village, interdependence of west and East where action's of one's has consequences faced by world wide. Recent, Russia-Ukraine war was an classic example of it. The war between two countries but consequences of it is not only limited to both. It's vulnerability particularly faced by small and least developed countries. The rising oil prices, geopolitical vulnerability, led to Inflation impact in Import dependent countries like India, of Asian-African. The fight between two has trampled the growth and development of small countries who have no direct connection with both. Same as grass trampled due to fight between two elephants. Even before Globalisation, the small countries are got trampled between fight of two superpowers USA and USSR by forming allies with small countries exploiting their Human resources, Natural resources, Economic Resources consequently. led them behind in the race of Development. The two world wars of 20th century has devastating effect for entire world. The war left with no winners only left with Millions of victims. The Hirosima & Nagasaki (Japan) attack by USA led to end of war, but also trampled 300,000 + civilian of the Japanese state. Similarly the Seven year of war between England and French for their capitalist intent drag small countries as their colonies into war and trampled their Economic, (Economic Drain), glorious Past (Ex. India from golden sparrow to Hungry sparrow). Hence, the Personal Interest over the Public Interest makes elephants blinds to see happiness of majority. For example the personal intent of hitler of Rule of Nazi killed millions Jews. The Berighosha policy of Ashoka for Expansion of his empire led devastating war such as Kailangana war where he trampled thousands of millions soldiers. The grasses are tramp not only trampled in fights and Battles but also get trampled indirectly or invisibly as done by chinas Debt trap policy giving economic support at times in crisis crisis to the small countries (Sri lanka, Pakistan) and manipulating its own self interest (china's silk road initiative) by trampling interest of other countries. Even in corporate world the Price war between two giant companies although it's initially beneficial for consumers but led to trampled small companies and retailers For example. JIO's free Internet in 2016's led to closer of many small telephony companies in India. The war for development has trampled the Environment and Animal Kingdom. The fruits of development & technological advancements was sweet for developed countries like USA but was bitter for underdeveloped or lest developed countries like African countries, Asian countries who facing natural calamities like cyclone, depleting rainfall, increasing sea level (survival question for Maldives, Kiribati Island) etc. The Recent Nepal's Glacier Lake Outburst Flood was an red light examples of how development activities of China led to trampled the thousands of people in Nepal. However, it is not always to unjustify the war or fight. The war of Mahabharat has justified the war for Righteousness of the Karma and for the Larger Public Interest (Dharma). Similarly, the war for Independence led by French People (French revolution), American People (American war of Independence), Indian Nationalist against British Colonism etc where grasses where not trampled but became empowered of their strength of unity. It was also seen in geopolitics in the form of Non - Alignment Movement, led by developing countries (India, Indonesia) against the allies of two super powers. The formation of Union of small African countries has strengthen their voice in International Organisation (UN, WTO etc) Moreover, the strength of grass lies in the roots, soil, water, however the strength of elephants lies itself it in the grass. Grass can live without elephants and elephants need grasses for their development. Likewise the developed countries of west (England, USA,) became developed and prosperous by the human resources of the East, Natural resources, market etc of the East. For example. Europe became colonist power or Industrialist Capitalist power due to resource extraction from the Asian-Afro countries. Hence, war has or conflicts has devastating consequences however avoidance of it has also has limits as said by Gautam Buddha 'Patience has limits'. The terrorist attack of Pahalgam, Pulwama, twin tower of America when the answer has to be give regressively. It is also stated by Gandhiji, war for national interest or to defend the interest of Nation citizens is a Dharma war (quoted from Gita). Although war should be last resort (Just war theory) after taking peaceful methods diplomatically, Economic sanctions, Bilateral - Multilateral talks etc to enhance the peaceful co-existence and co-development of Elephants and grasses.
When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled. The above aphorism was reflecting today's global position. As world became an global village, interdependence of west and East where action's of one's has consequences faced by world wide. Recent, Russia-Ukraine war was an classic example of it. The war between two countries but consequences of it is not only limited to both. It's vulnerability particularly faced by small and least developed countries. The rising oil prices, geopolitical vulnerability, led to Inflation impact in Import dependent countries like India, of Asian-African. The fight between two has trampled the growth and development of small countries who have no direct connection with both. Same as grass trampled due to fight between two elephants. Even before Globalisation, the small countries are got trampled between fight of two superpowers USA and USSR by forming allies with small countries exploiting their Human resources, Natural resources, Economic Resources consequently. led them behind in the race of Development. The two world wars of 20th century has devastating effect for entire world. The war left with no winners only left with Millions of victims. The Hirosima & Nagasaki (Japan) attack by USA led to end of war, but also trampled 300,000 + civilian of the Japanese state. Similarly the Seven year of war between England and French for their capitalist intent drag small countries as their colonies into war and trampled their Economic, (Economic Drain), glorious Past (Ex. India from golden sparrow to Hungry sparrow). Hence, the Personal Interest over the Public Interest makes elephants blinds to see happiness of majority. For example the personal intent of hitler of Rule of Nazi killed millions Jews. The Berighosha policy of Ashoka for Expansion of his empire led devastating war such as Kailangana war where he trampled thousands of millions soldiers. The grasses are tramp not only trampled in fights and Battles but also get trampled indirectly or invisibly as done by chinas Debt trap policy giving economic support at times in crisis crisis to the small countries (Sri lanka, Pakistan) and manipulating its own self interest (china's silk road initiative) by trampling interest of other countries. Even in corporate world the Price war between two giant companies although it's initially beneficial for consumers but led to trampled small companies and retailers For example. JIO's free Internet in 2016's led to closer of many small telephony companies in India. The war for development has trampled the Environment and Animal Kingdom. The fruits of development & technological advancements was sweet for developed countries like USA but was bitter for underdeveloped or lest developed countries like African countries, Asian countries who facing natural calamities like cyclone, depleting rainfall, increasing sea level (survival question for Maldives, Kiribati Island) etc. The Recent Nepal's Glacier Lake Outburst Flood was an red light examples of how development activities of China led to trampled the thousands of people in Nepal. However, it is not always to unjustify the war or fight. The war of Mahabharat has justified the war for Righteousness of the Karma and for the Larger Public Interest (Dharma). Similarly, the war for Independence led by French People (French revolution), American People (American war of Independence), Indian Nationalist against British Colonism etc where grasses where not trampled but became empowered of their strength of unity. It was also seen in geopolitics in the form of Non - Alignment Movement, led by developing countries (India, Indonesia) against the allies of two super powers. The formation of Union of small African countries has strengthen their voice in International Organisation (UN, WTO etc) Moreover, the strength of grass lies in the roots, soil, water, however the strength of elephants lies itself it in the grass. Grass can live without elephants and elephants need grasses for their development. Likewise the developed countries of west (England, USA,) became developed and prosperous by the human resources of the East, Natural resources, market etc of the East. For example. Europe became colonist power or Industrialist Capitalist power due to resource extraction from the Asian-Afro countries. Hence, war has or conflicts has devastating consequences however avoidance of it has also has limits as said by Gautam Buddha 'Patience has limits'. The terrorist attack of Pahalgam, Pulwama, twin tower of America when the answer has to be give regressively. It is also stated by Gandhiji, war for national interest or to defend the interest of Nation citizens is a Dharma war (quoted from Gita). Although war should be last resort (Just war theory) after taking peaceful methods diplomatically, Economic sanctions, Bilateral - Multilateral talks etc to enhance the peaceful co-existence and co-development of Elephants and grasses.
The Art of First Impressions
Your introduction is your one chance to make the examiner want to read more. Think of it as a movie trailer: grab attention, make a promise, and create anticipation. Most students start with definitions - the essay equivalent of 'once upon a time.' Distinguished essays start with intrigue.
"The introduction attempts to relate a proverb to global conflicts, which is a relevant theme, but lacks clarity and flow."
"The use of an aphorism is an interesting start that could evoke curiosity."
"The thesis and roadmap feel vague and do not provide a clear analytical direction or preview of the essay's structure."
"Strengthening the thesis and providing a more engaging roadmap would enhance clarity and engagement."
You Have:
- A hook in the form of an aphorism
You Need:
- A clear and engaging thesis Thesis
- A structured roadmap of the essay Roadmap
The Hook: Your First 10 Words
The hook is your opening punch. It should make the examiner's eyebrows rise, create a question in their mind, or present a tension that demands resolution. Definitions don't do this. Questions, paradoxes, and vivid scenarios do.
Most students start with 'X has been important since ancient times.' This is true but boring. Your hook should be surprising, not safe.
"When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled."
1 Provocative Question
"What happens to the common man when global powers clash?"
Why it works: This directly engages readers by prompting them to consider the broader implications of conflict on individuals.
2 Paradox Hook
"In the great chess game of geopolitics, it is often the pawns who suffer the most."
Why it works: This highlights the irony in international relations where major powers’ actions have dire consequences for weaker nations.
3 Scenario Hook
"Picture a small nation caught in the geopolitical crossfire of superpowers; its fate hanging by a thread."
Why it works: This scenario situates the reader emotionally within a compelling context and creates immediate interest.
Ask a question that challenges assumptions or creates intellectual tension
In an age of [modern reality], why do [surprising behavior/belief] persist?
Present a contradiction that creates cognitive dissonance
[Concept] promises [X], yet delivers [opposite/unexpected].
Paint a vivid picture with unexpected actors or situations
A [unexpected person 1] does [X]. A [unexpected person 2] does [Y]. [Pattern/Insight].
Lead with a surprising number that demands explanation
[Surprising statistic]. Behind this number lies [deeper truth].
X has been important since ancient times.In today's world, X is very relevant.X is a topic of great significance.Since time immemorial, X has...X can be defined as...
"The first sentence tells the examiner who they're dealing with. A definition says 'average student.' A paradox says 'someone who thinks differently.' First impressions stick."
Foundation: Thesis + Roadmap
Your thesis is your promise to the reader - what you're going to prove. Your roadmap is the journey you'll take them on. Together, they set up your entire essay. A weak foundation means the examiner isn't sure where you're going.
Thesis without a position is just a topic sentence. Roadmap without anticipation is just a table of contents.
"The above aphorism was reflecting today's global position."
1 Crisp Stand
"The enduring conflict between superpowers profoundly endangers smaller nations, underlining the urgent need for diplomatic solutions."
Why it works: This statement presents a clear and debatable perspective, inviting further discussion.
2 Debatable Angle
"While superpowers pursue their interests, the resulting chaos disproportionately impacts smaller nations, raising moral questions about dire consequences."
Why it works: It introduces a moral dilemma that could engage readers in a thoughtful debate.
3 Sophisticated Balance
"In an interdependent world, the strife between powerful nations often exacerbates the plight of those marginalised, challenging us to rethink responsibility in global politics."
Why it works: This adds complexity, acknowledging interdependence while questioning the ethical aspects of global conflict.
Crisp Stand
Clear, direct position with analytical edge
Debatable Angle
Acknowledge counter-view, then take position
Sophisticated Balance
Embrace complexity with a nuanced position
"As world became an global village, interdependence of west and East where action's of one's has consequences faced by world wide."
1 Natural Flow
"This essay will explore the geopolitical consequences of conflicts, delve into historical precedents, and reflect on the public's awareness of war's moral dimensions."
Why it works: This gives the reader a clear trajectory of the topics that will be discussed, building anticipation.
2 Question-Based
"What are the geopolitical ramifications of today’s conflicts? How have previous wars reshaped smaller nations? And what responsibilities lie with the world today?"
Why it works: Framing the roadmap as questions engages curiosity and hints at the nuances being unpacked.
3 Thematic Preview
"By delving into the implications of power struggles, examining historical patterns, and questioning public interest in warfare, this essay sheds light on the true cost of conflict."
Why it works: Creating intrigue without revealing too much keeps the reader wondering about the details.
Natural Flow
Weave structure into narrative without listing
Question-Based
Frame structure as questions to be answered
Thematic Preview
Drop intriguing references without explaining
Thesis: "A clear thesis tells the examiner 'I'm going to argue something.' This creates anticipation and gives them a lens to evaluate your essay. No thesis = no argument = lower marks."
Roadmap: "A good roadmap tells the examiner 'this essay is organized and going somewhere interesting.' A list tells them 'this student is mechanical.' Anticipation beats information."
The Opening Polish
Your introduction is the most scrutinized part of your essay. Every word matters. We'll teach you three style techniques that instantly elevate your opening: Parallelism, Antithesis, and Crescendo.
Introductions often suffer from 'playing it safe.' This is exactly when you need to take stylistic risks.
"Language lacks precision and the tone can be improved for better impact."
Parallelism
MissingAntithesis
MissingCrescendo
Partial"As world became an global village, interdependence of west and East where action's of one's has consequences faced by world wide."
"When two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled."
"In the grand geopolitical arena, it is the vulnerable nations—the 'grass'—that bear the brunt of titanic conflicts."
Parallelism
Repeating grammatical structure for rhythm and emphasis
Antithesis
Placing contrasting ideas in parallel structure to highlight tension
Crescendo
Building from small to large, quiet to loud, personal to universal
The Complete Transformation
See how all the elements come together. This is what a distinguished introduction looks like.
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Words AfterWhen two elephants fight, it is the grass that gets trampled. The above aphorism was reflecting today's global position. As world became an global village, interdependence of west and East where action's of one's has consequences faced by world wide. Recent, Russia-Ukraine war was an classic example of it. The war between two countries but consequences of it is not only limited to both.
What happens to the common man when global powers clash? In today’s geopolitical landscape, the struggle between mighty nations significantly impacts smaller nations, often leading to dire circumstances. This essay will explore the geopolitical consequences of conflicts, delve into historical precedents, and reflect on the public's awareness of war's moral dimensions.
hook
Engaged readers with a provocative question.
thesis
Stated a clear, debatable position.
roadmap
Provided a clear, engaging preview of the essay structure.
language
Enhanced clarity and precision in language.
Ideal Structure
- Hook (attention)
- Thesis (promise)
- Roadmap (anticipation)
Common Mistake
DefinitionVague statementList of sections
Most introductions are forgettable because they play it safe. Distinguished introductions take risks: provocative hooks, debatable theses, and roadmaps that tease.
First Impression Effect
The first paragraph colors the entire reading experience. Start strong and you're read generously.
Differentiation Signal
A unique opening signals 'this student is different.' The examiner pays more attention.
Thesis as Lens
A clear thesis gives the examiner a framework. Without it, they're lost and frustrated.
Anticipation Value
A good roadmap creates eagerness. The examiner looks forward to each section instead of dreading it.
Stage 1 Definition Writer
Focus: Stop opening with definitions
Goal: Recognize boring openings
Stage 2 Hook Crafter
Focus: Master 3 hook types
Goal: Grab attention consistently
Stage 3 Thesis Builder
Focus: State debatable positions
Goal: Make clear arguments
Stage 4 Master Opener
Focus: Integrate all elements with style
Goal: Unforgettable introductions