Performance Report
Main causes of farmer suicide in India and the measures Govt has taken to address this
Fair
45
/ 100
Overall Performance
Fair
Score Breakdown
Introduction
Hook, Thesis, Roadmap
20
/ 100
Hook: 30
Thesis: 20
Roadmap: 0
Essay Sections
Content, Strategy, Analysis
62
/ 100
Content: 76
Strategy: 32
Analytical: 65
Conclusion
Synthesis, Closure, Impact
40
/ 100
Synthesis: 40
Closure: 60
Forward Look: 30
Impact: 20
Language
Writing quality across all sections
58
/ 100
45 100
You made a standard attempt.
The student has structured the essay around the broad themes of causes, government measures, and societal roles, but lacks depth and critical analysis in several areas.
Good foundations, but needs deeper insights and stronger connections for a top score.
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STRUCTURAL GAP: Introduction β€” Revise the introduction to include a thesis statement that outlines the multifaceted nature of the issue and previews the structure of the essay. (A clear thesis establishes a roadmap for the reader, enhancing the coherence and flow of your argument right from the start.)
Introduction
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Words: 90
Target: 60-100

Agriculture is the backbone of Indian Economy, nearly half of the country force depends upon it. However beneath the green fields lies a profound and persistent humanitarian crisis: The Tragic Phenomenon of Farmers Suicides. This very phenomenon is deeply constructed and concentrated in states like Maharashtra, Karnataka, Andhra Pradesh, Madhya Pradesh. The crisis represents a complex web of various causes, some of Causes of Farmers Suicides 1. Indebtedness and Credit Crisis Small and marginal farmers often struggle to obtain loans from the institutional banks due to illiteracy, lack of collateral.

Agriculture is the backbone of Indian Economy, nearly half of the country force depends upon it. However beneath the green fields lies a profound and persistent humanitarian crisis: The Tragic Phenomenon of Farmers Suicides. This very phenomenon is deeply constructed and concentrated in states like Maharashtra, Karnataka, Andhra Pradesh, Madhya Pradesh. The crisis represents a complex web of various causes, some of Causes of Farmers Suicides 1. Indebtedness and Credit Crisis Small and marginal farmers often struggle to obtain loans from the institutional banks due to illiteracy, lack of collateral.

Causes of Farmers Suicides
223 3
Words: 223
Target: 80-150

As a result, they depend on private moneylenders. These money-lenders charge very high interest rates. When crops fail or income is low, farmers cannot repay their loans. Over time, the debt increases and become unmanageable. Continuous borrowing and repayment pressure create extreme mental stress. Other than these, Medical emergencies in families often require large expenses. Social obligations such as marriages add additional financial burden. It is not only an economic problem but also a social stigma that people feel ashamed to talk about. β‘‘ Crop Failure and Rising input costs Crop Failure is another major reason. Agriculture in India is highly dependent on rainfall. Unpredictable weather condition such as droughts, floods, and heatwaves often destroy crops. In addition, pest attacks can damage entire fields. Farmers invest money, labour, and hope into each crop season, but a single natural disaster can lead to total loss. In such situations, there is often no immediate or sufficient compensation. The rising cost of agriculture further worsens the situation. The prices of seeds, fertilizers, pesticides, diesel, and irrigation have increased significantly. Although the Govt. announces MSP, many farmers are unable to sell their produce at these rates due to limited procurement and market access. β‘’ Other than aforementioned causes; Land Fragmentation -> Inheritance practices across successive generations have systematically fragmented agricultural land is another cause responsible for it.

As a result, they depend on private moneylenders. These money-lenders charge very high interest rates. When crops fail or income is low, farmers cannot repay their loans. Over time, the debt increases and become unmanageable. Continuous borrowing and repayment pressure create extreme mental stress. Other than these, Medical emergencies in families often require large expenses. Social obligations such as marriages add additional financial burden. It is not only an economic problem but also a social stigma that people feel ashamed to talk about. β‘‘ Crop Failure and Rising input costs Crop Failure is another major reason. Agriculture in India is highly dependent on rainfall. Unpredictable weather condition such as droughts, floods, and heatwaves often destroy crops. In addition, pest attacks can damage entire fields. Farmers invest money, labour, and hope into each crop season, but a single natural disaster can lead to total loss. In such situations, there is often no immediate or sufficient compensation. The rising cost of agriculture further worsens the situation. The prices of seeds, fertilizers, pesticides, diesel, and irrigation have increased significantly. Although the Govt. announces MSP, many farmers are unable to sell their produce at these rates due to limited procurement and market access. β‘’ Other than aforementioned causes; Land Fragmentation -> Inheritance practices across successive generations have systematically fragmented agricultural land is another cause responsible for it.

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GAP: Causes of Farmers Suicides β€” Deepen the analysis by including case studies from affected regions and evaluating the effectiveness of government responses. (By incorporating real-life examples and assessing policy impacts, you can transform a descriptive section into a robust analysis that highlights the complexities of the issue.)
Government Measures and Initiatives
265 4
Words: 265
Target: 80-150

Measures taken by the Government To alleviate this multi-dimensional crisis and provide structural stability to rural families, the Govt. of India has made several welfare schemes. 1) PM-KISAN (Pradhan Mantri Kisan Samman Nidhi) It provides β‚Ή6,000 annually via Direct Benefit Transfer (DBT) in three equal installments to eligible landholding families without the interference or without relying on the money lenders. 2) PMFBY (Pradhan Mantri Fasal Bima Yojana) It provides crop insurance against specified crop losses caused by risks such as drought, floods, pests and diseases. 3) KCC - Kisan Credit Cards It provides institutional credit for agricultural and allied activities alongside helping farmers in avoiding dependence on high interest informal lenders. 4) MSP (Minimum Support Price) Minimum Support Price is announced for major crops while procurement operations aim to provide farmers with price support and reduce distress sales. Other than these; the schemes or measures taken by the Central Govt. like: Pradhan Mantri Krishi Sanchayee Yojana (PMKSY) for irrigation facilities Soil Health Card e-Nam (Electronic Natural Agricultural Market) which improve in connecting agricultural markets digitally. MGNREGA (Mahatma Gandhi National Rural Government Employment Guarantee Act) Promotion of Dairy, Fisheries, poultry, etc. are highly commendable. The state Govt of Odisha has implemented central schemes and also introduce their own programmes according to local agricultural conditions. 1. KALIA/CM-KISAN - Provide financial assistance (Krushak Assistance for Livelihood and Income Augmentation) to small and marginalised farmers, sharecroppers, landless agricultural households. Along with it Odisha implements PMFBY, Crop insurance to protect farmers against notified crop losses, Odisha has introduced the Samruddha Krushak Yojana - providing additional support linked to paddy procurement.

Measures taken by the Government To alleviate this multi-dimensional crisis and provide structural stability to rural families, the Govt. of India has made several welfare schemes. 1) PM-KISAN (Pradhan Mantri Kisan Samman Nidhi) It provides β‚Ή6,000 annually via Direct Benefit Transfer (DBT) in three equal installments to eligible landholding families without the interference or without relying on the money lenders. 2) PMFBY (Pradhan Mantri Fasal Bima Yojana) It provides crop insurance against specified crop losses caused by risks such as drought, floods, pests and diseases. 3) KCC - Kisan Credit Cards It provides institutional credit for agricultural and allied activities alongside helping farmers in avoiding dependence on high interest informal lenders. 4) MSP (Minimum Support Price) Minimum Support Price is announced for major crops while procurement operations aim to provide farmers with price support and reduce distress sales. Other than these; the schemes or measures taken by the Central Govt. like: Pradhan Mantri Krishi Sanchayee Yojana (PMKSY) for irrigation facilities Soil Health Card e-Nam (Electronic Natural Agricultural Market) which improve in connecting agricultural markets digitally. MGNREGA (Mahatma Gandhi National Rural Government Employment Guarantee Act) Promotion of Dairy, Fisheries, poultry, etc. are highly commendable. The state Govt of Odisha has implemented central schemes and also introduce their own programmes according to local agricultural conditions. 1. KALIA/CM-KISAN - Provide financial assistance (Krushak Assistance for Livelihood and Income Augmentation) to small and marginalised farmers, sharecroppers, landless agricultural households. Along with it Odisha implements PMFBY, Crop insurance to protect farmers against notified crop losses, Odisha has introduced the Samruddha Krushak Yojana - providing additional support linked to paddy procurement.

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GAP: Government Measures and Initiatives β€” Include an impact assessment of the government schemes and discuss regional variations in their implementation. (Evaluating the effectiveness of the measures will provide a critical lens through which to view government actions, making your argument more compelling and nuanced.)
Role of Society and Community
244 6 1
Words: 244
Target: 80-150

etc. What Can We as a common People do? 1. We can promote Farmers Producer organisations where they can collectively purchase inputs and sell produce. 2. Promotion of Digital Literacy and Local-Language access which include use of technology responsibly - Weather Alerts - Market-Price Information - Crop-Disease identification and agricultural advisories 3. Promote sustainable agriculture through water conservation, soil conservation, Organic Farming, Use or Increase in use of Millets, etc encouragement of direct farmer-consumer linkages etc. "A farmer should not have to choose between the debt and health". We have seen in the movies like "Jawan" - addresses the critical socio-political issue of farmer suicides and debt in India acting as primary catalyst; The Movie "Kisaan" - focuses the tensions between agricultural livelihoods, land pressures and unequal distribution of economic opportunities etc. Though the movie "Lagaan" does not co-relate with it; but it is a landmark how rural farmers fighting oppressive British taxation (Lagaan) during the agrarian crises. So, The solution to farmer suicides lies not in treating suicide as an isolated event but in addressing the structural vulnerabilities that precede it. It cannot be solved by temporary financial relief packages or short term loan waivers alone which itself can be seen from the above mentioned movies as examples. True stability will arrive by developing climate resilient crop varieties, non-farm employment opportunities and most importantly making institutional mental health counselling accessible within rural communities to protect the lives of those who feed the nation.

etc. What Can We as a common People do? 1. We can promote Farmers Producer organisations where they can collectively purchase inputs and sell produce. 2. Promotion of Digital Literacy and Local-Language access which include use of technology responsibly - Weather Alerts - Market-Price Information - Crop-Disease identification and agricultural advisories 3. Promote sustainable agriculture through water conservation, soil conservation, Organic Farming, Use or Increase in use of Millets, etc encouragement of direct farmer-consumer linkages etc. "A farmer should not have to choose between the debt and health". We have seen in the movies like "Jawan" - addresses the critical socio-political issue of farmer suicides and debt in India acting as primary catalyst; The Movie "Kisaan" - focuses the tensions between agricultural livelihoods, land pressures and unequal distribution of economic opportunities etc. Though the movie "Lagaan" does not co-relate with it; but it is a landmark how rural farmers fighting oppressive British taxation (Lagaan) during the agrarian crises. So, The solution to farmer suicides lies not in treating suicide as an isolated event but in addressing the structural vulnerabilities that precede it. It cannot be solved by temporary financial relief packages or short term loan waivers alone which itself can be seen from the above mentioned movies as examples. True stability will arrive by developing climate resilient crop varieties, non-farm employment opportunities and most importantly making institutional mental health counselling accessible within rural communities to protect the lives of those who feed the nation.

Conclusion
41
Words: 41
Target: 60-100

A farmer needs both a financial safety net and an emotional safety net. "He cares for the nation, Let us care for him. But not with tears and pain, But with hope and support." Cause The nation prospers, when he prospers.

A farmer needs both a financial safety net and an emotional safety net. "He cares for the nation, Let us care for him. But not with tears and pain, But with hope and support." Cause The nation prospers, when he prospers.

Focus on enhancing your analysis and integrating real-world examples to strengthen your arguments. Ensure that each section builds on the previous one for a cohesive narrative.
20/100 Needs Work
Introduction Analysis
The Art of First Impressions

Your introduction is your one chance to make the examiner want to read more. Think of it as a movie trailer: grab attention, make a promise, and create anticipation. Most students start with definitions - the essay equivalent of 'once upon a time.' Distinguished essays start with intrigue.

Introduction to Farmer Suicides in India Introduction
20/100 Emerging
30
Hook (S01)
20
Thesis (S02)
0
Roadmap (S03)
30
Language
Professor's Remark

"The introduction presents an urgent issue, but lacks a compelling hook and a clear roadmap."

What I Liked

"The opening sentence identifies an important thematic element, linking agriculture to a humanitarian crisis."

What I Found Weak

"The introduction could be greatly enhanced by a more engaging hook and a structured roadmap that preview the essay's argument."

What Would Push Higher

"Incorporate a striking statistic or question as a hook, establish a strong thesis with a clear stance, and outline the sections to create anticipation."

Your Introduction Ingredients
Current: A statement about agriculture's importance and a brief mention of the crisis.
Target: Hook + Thesis + Roadmap

You Have:
  • A statement about the agricultural economy
  • Mention of the humanitarian crisis
You Need:
  • Engaging hook through a question or paradox Hook
  • Clear thesis with a debatable stance Thesis
  • Roadmap outlining essay structure Roadmap
A strong introduction should captivate the reader with a compelling narrative that highlights urgency and outlines the analytical depth of the essay.
The Hook: Your First 10 Words

The hook is your opening punch. It should make the examiner's eyebrows rise, create a question in their mind, or present a tension that demands resolution. Definitions don't do this. Questions, paradoxes, and vivid scenarios do.

Most students start with 'X has been important since ancient times.' This is true but boring. Your hook should be surprising, not safe.

Hook Score (S01) 30/100
Your Hook Attempt Sentence 1

"Agriculture is the backbone of Indian Economy, nearly half of the country force depends upon it."

No Hook Detected
Effectiveness: The opening explains agriculture's importance but lacks the urgency or engagement of a strong hook, making it easy to overlook.
What's Missing: A more effective hook could draw in the reader emotionally, presenting the tragic reality of farmer suicides in a gripping way.
Choose an alternative
Hook Alternatives
1 Provocative Question

"What drives an Indian farmer to take their own life amidst the lush green fields of their labor?"

Why it works: This question immediately engages the reader, compelling them to think deeply about the stark contrast between agriculture's outward prosperity and the inner turmoil of the farmers.

2 Paradox Hook

"In a nation where agriculture flourishes, a silent epidemic of despair stalks the fields."

Why it works: This juxtaposition creates a compelling contrast, highlighting the irony of abundance alongside crisis, and piquing curiosity.

3 Scenario Hook

"Picture a farmer, once vibrant with hope, now trapped in a cycle of debt and despairβ€”such is the harsh reality in India today."

Why it works: This scenario invites the reader to visualize the tragic circumstances, generating empathy and concern right from the start.

Hook Types Reference

Ask a question that challenges assumptions or creates intellectual tension

Template:
In an age of [modern reality], why do [surprising behavior/belief] persist?
When to use: When your topic has a modern vs. traditional tension
Memory Hook: Make the examiner's brain itch with a question it wants answered.

Present a contradiction that creates cognitive dissonance

Template:
[Concept] promises [X], yet delivers [opposite/unexpected].
When to use: When your topic has inherent tensions or contradictions
Memory Hook: Paradox = Intellectual tension. The reader must read on to resolve it.

Paint a vivid picture with unexpected actors or situations

Template:
A [unexpected person 1] does [X]. A [unexpected person 2] does [Y]. [Pattern/Insight].
When to use: When concrete examples create surprise
Memory Hook: Show, don't tell. Concrete images beat abstract statements.

Lead with a surprising number that demands explanation

Template:
[Surprising statistic]. Behind this number lies [deeper truth].
When to use: When you have a genuinely surprising data point
Memory Hook: Numbers shock when they contradict expectations.
Weak Openings to Avoid
  • X has been important since ancient times.
  • In today's world, X is very relevant.
  • X is a topic of great significance.
  • Since time immemorial, X has...
  • X can be defined as...
Examiner Psychology

"The first sentence tells the examiner who they're dealing with. A definition says 'average student.' A paradox says 'someone who thinks differently.' First impressions stick."

Foundation: Thesis + Roadmap

Your thesis is your promise to the reader - what you're going to prove. Your roadmap is the journey you'll take them on. Together, they set up your entire essay. A weak foundation means the examiner isn't sure where you're going.

Thesis without a position is just a topic sentence. Roadmap without anticipation is just a table of contents.

Thesis Score (S02) 20/100
Your Thesis Attempt Sentence 1

"However beneath the green fields lies a profound and persistent humanitarian crisis: The Tragic Phenomenon of Farmers Suicides."

Effectiveness: The thesis identifies the issue clearly but lacks a debatable position or analytical direction.
What's Missing: To strengthen it, consider introducing a stance on the causes and implications of the crisis to invite discussion.
Thesis Upgrades
1 Crisp Stand

"The rising tide of farmer suicides in India is not an isolated tragedy; it highlights systemic failures in agricultural support and mental health resources."

Why it works: This statement asserts a clear stance on the complexity of the issue, encouraging readers to consider broader systemic critiques.

2 Debatable Angle

"While the romantic notion of the farmer's life persists, the alarming rate of suicides reveals a stark truth about neglect in rural policy."

Why it works: This position acknowledges a common perception while introducing a counter-view that challenges the reader to think critically.

3 Sophisticated Balance

"Although agriculture remains a vital pillar of India's economy, the prevailing crises of debt and despair afflicting farmers paint a harrowing picture of neglect and urgency."

Why it works: This balanced statement embraces the complexity of the situation, recognizing agriculture's importance while spotlighting critical issues.

Thesis Types Reference
Crisp Stand

Clear, direct position with analytical edge

Template: [X] is [position] because [reason that can be debated].
If no one could disagree, it's not a thesis.
Debatable Angle

Acknowledge counter-view, then take position

Template: While critics argue [counter-view], this essay contends [your position].
Show you know the debate, then pick a side.
Sophisticated Balance

Embrace complexity with a nuanced position

Template: [X] is both [A] and [opposite of A] - and [implication of this duality].
Nuance signals intellectual maturity.

Roadmap Score (S03) 0/100
Your Roadmap Attempt Sentence Not applicable

"Not present"

Effectiveness: The introduction currently lacks a roadmap completely.
What's Missing: There is no preview of topics or structure that creates anticipation for the reader.
Roadmap Upgrades
1 Natural Flow

"This essay will explore the economic and emotional factors leading to this crisis, the governmental responses so far, and the essential role of community support in alleviating farmer distress."

Why it works: This structured preview guides the reader through the essay's logical progression, fostering curiosity about the depth of analysis offered.

2 Question-Based

"What causes this crisis, what solutions have been proposed, and how can the community come together to support farmers?"

Why it works: Posing these questions sparks curiosity and indicates what the essay will address, making it engaging for the reader.

3 Thematic Preview

"We will delve into the intricate causes behind farmer suicides, examine the government's efforts to counteract this trend, and analyze the vital contribution of societal involvement."

Why it works: This thematic roadmap teases the reader without revealing everything, inviting them to learn more as they progress through the essay.

Roadmap Types Reference
Natural Flow

Weave structure into narrative without listing

Template: To understand [theme], we must first [section 1], then [section 2], and finally [section 3 with tension].
Hide the list inside a story.
Question-Based

Frame structure as questions to be answered

Template: Three questions guide this inquiry: [Q1]? [Q2]? [Q3]?
Questions create curiosity. Readers want answers.
Thematic Preview

Drop intriguing references without explaining

Template: From [intriguing reference 1] to [intriguing reference 2] - this essay maps [terrain].
Tease, don't spoil. Make them want to know more.
Examiner Psychology

Thesis: "A clear thesis tells the examiner 'I'm going to argue something.' This creates anticipation and gives them a lens to evaluate your essay. No thesis = no argument = lower marks."

Roadmap: "A good roadmap tells the examiner 'this essay is organized and going somewhere interesting.' A list tells them 'this student is mechanical.' Anticipation beats information."

The Opening Polish

Your introduction is the most scrutinized part of your essay. Every word matters. We'll teach you three style techniques that instantly elevate your opening: Parallelism, Antithesis, and Crescendo.

Introductions often suffer from 'playing it safe.' This is exactly when you need to take stylistic risks.

Language Score 30/100
Examiner's First Impression

"The language used has the potential to be striking but lacks fluidity and sophistication."

Style Techniques Check
Parallelism
Missing
Your attempt: "Not present"
Enhanced version: "The plight of farmers is marked by debt, despair, and desperation."
Antithesis
Missing
Your attempt: "Not present"
Enhanced version: "While lush fields promise prosperity, they often conceal profound pain."
Crescendo
Missing
Your attempt: "Not present"
Enhanced version: "In this age of agricultural advancement, the cries of the farmers grow louder and more desperate."
Sentence Transformation Ladder
Sentence 1
Original:
"Agriculture is the backbone of Indian Economy, nearly half of the country force depends upon it."
Good "Agriculture supports the Indian economy, with nearly half of the population reliant on it."
Better "As the backbone of the Indian economy, agriculture sustains almost half of the nation's populace."
Best "Agriculture stands as a pillar of India's economic structure, underpinning the livelihoods of nearly fifty percent of its citizens."
The advanced and premium versions employ varied vocabulary and refined structure, enhancing clarity and sophistication.
The Power Opener
Original

"Agriculture is the backbone of Indian Economy, nearly half of the country force depends upon it."

Diagnosis: This opening is informative but lacks engagement and fails to evoke emotional resonance.
Power Version

"What drives an Indian farmer to take their own life amidst the lush green fields of their labor?"

Techniques used: Provocative Question
Style Technique Reference
Parallelism

Repeating grammatical structure for rhythm and emphasis

Example: "Faith consoles the grieving, binds the community, and challenges the policy-maker."
Template: [Subject] [verb 1] the [object 1], [verb 2] the [object 2], and [verb 3] the [object 3].
Think triplets: THREE parallel phrases hit harder than two.
Antithesis

Placing contrasting ideas in parallel structure to highlight tension

Example: "Science asks how; faith asks why. The modern mind needs both questions."
Template: [X] does [A]; [Y] does [opposite of A]. [Resolution/implication].
Antithesis = Intellectual tension. Find the BUT in your topic.
Crescendo

Building from small to large, quiet to loud, personal to universal

Example: "From whispered prayers to temple bells to the roar of pilgrim millions - faith scales from intimate to immense."
Template: From [small/personal] to [medium] to [large/universal] - [insight].
Crescendo = Volume up. Start whisper, end thunderclap.
The Complete Transformation

See how all the elements come together. This is what a distinguished introduction looks like.

90

Words Before

72

Words After
Your Original Introduction

Agriculture is the backbone of Indian Economy, nearly half of the country force depends upon it. However beneath the green fields lies a profound and persistent humanitarian crisis: The Tragic Phenomenon of Farmers Suicides.

Transformation Applied
Distinguished Introduction

What drives an Indian farmer to take their own life amidst the lush green fields of their labor? The alarming trend of farmer suicides in India reveals systemic failures in agricultural support and mental health resources, making it imperative to explore the causes behind this tragedy, the government's initiatives to address it, and the vital role of community support.

What Changed in Each Layer
hook

Transformed an informative statement into a provocative question.

thesis

Clarified the stance on the complexity of the crisis.

roadmap

Introduced a clear overview of essay structure.

language

Enhanced fluidity and vocabulary throughout.

Introduction Structure Blueprint
Ideal Structure
  1. Hook (attention)
  2. Thesis (promise)
  3. Roadmap (anticipation)
Common Mistake
  1. Definition
  2. Vague statement
  3. List of sections

Most introductions are forgettable because they play it safe. Distinguished introductions take risks: provocative hooks, debatable theses, and roadmaps that tease.

Inside the Examiner's Mind
First Impression Effect

The first paragraph colors the entire reading experience. Start strong and you're read generously.

Differentiation Signal

A unique opening signals 'this student is different.' The examiner pays more attention.

Thesis as Lens

A clear thesis gives the examiner a framework. Without it, they're lost and frustrated.

Anticipation Value

A good roadmap creates eagerness. The examiner looks forward to each section instead of dreading it.

Your Growth Journey
Stage 1 Definition Writer

Focus: Stop opening with definitions

Goal: Recognize boring openings

Week 1-2
Stage 2 Hook Crafter

Focus: Master 3 hook types

Goal: Grab attention consistently

Week 3-4
Stage 3 Thesis Builder

Focus: State debatable positions

Goal: Make clear arguments

Week 5-6
Stage 4 Master Opener

Focus: Integrate all elements with style

Goal: Unforgettable introductions

Week 7+